If I let my mind wonder
it plagues me like a disease.
Never to escape from
and never to be at ease.
I think about so many things,
that brings my mind such pain.
And trying to push them back
makes my mind feel weak and strained.
I want so badly to be free
from all this inner strife.
To be happy and joyful
the remainder of my life.
But the harder that I try,
the worse I seem to feel.
Until the whole world's filled with black,
and nothing in it's real.
Connecting is the hardest part,
to all who surround me.
It's hard to even feel their touch,
when they're holding me tightly.
Author notes
I have a really hard time connecting to people and it can be very frustrating. I don't know if this is what you were looking for but I hope that you like it. 
A contest entry
- Frustration by Polaja.
1200 points, ended November 13, 2008, 40 entries
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Frustration can be many things hon yours is just one way of explaining it and you did such a good job of it. Failing to connect yes I find that to but it doesnt mean your wrong or you failed maybe it is them at fault for not wanting a good person to talk with or know. You have to try to stay just as you are hon let them see you for who you are inside they either take you as you are or go elsewhere there will be many who will want your company who will find you a good friend it's these people you should be getting to know
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You are very right. Thank you.
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I've often found that failing to connect comes from two very different reasons:
1. Lack of confidence. When you feel worthless or, at least, unworthy, you don't want to connect to others as you think that they will discover about you what you already believe and so you keep your distance.
2. You are so unlike the people around you that you cannot relate to them.
I hope that if you fall in the first category, that you realize that you are worthy and build up your confidence. If you fall in the latter category, then you need to realize that you don't HAVE to connect with those people...just accept the differences and look for others with which you have more in common.
Nice structure to the poem. You did a good job with the meter. While "me" & "tightly" weren't the best of rhymes, the rest didn't sound forced so kudos there. I might suggest that you want "wander" in S1L1, but it may be that you have what you have for some specific reason. I leave that to you
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This is what I was asking for I like the way that you explain yourself easily through rhyme - this is a great expression of feelings and I really liked the openness of your words nice rhythm and enjoyable poetry!
Thank you for entering
Polly
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Well I really like it my friend. I thought it flowed really good. Good luck in the contest. In Love & Light... Blessed Be! ~~Iridessa MoonFlower~~
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I really like this and I think you are giving them just what they are asking for.
perfect
good luck
hugs moony
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