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Two mothers pain

Hello there grieving mother

Who stands beside a grave

Let me hold your hand

Or jusy stay awhile just here

Let me take those flowers

That are shaking in your hands

You are talking to a mother

Who herself so understands

Broken hearted mother

With your heart and soul exposed

You feel so insecure

And most times so all alone

We will weep together

And moarn are beautiful sons

And rejoice forever when the

Serenity deceices to come

Ben and stephens in heaven

Laughing off there socks

The love that we once gave them

They return it now to us

Wipe away those salted tears

Together we will pray

Ask our boys to guide us

As we turn to walk away

 

Author notes

I was inspired to write this poem for a beautiful mother full of soul who lost her son ben i also lost my son and i have found her words so comforting we both know and feel the same i have walked in her shoes washed in her tears and share all her fears she is truely an inspiration to me and i felt i had to write about it any one who has lost some one so dear will understand the hurt pain that comes with the loss

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  • RareFlower
    January 8

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    a perfect lamant

    beautiful and heart breaking.. I lost a daughter and your words tore through my defences to the core, so that i may cry.. Thankyou for your courage to write such shattering words.
    Love and light always to you
    RareFlower


  • Ativan
    October 29, 2008

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    "And most times so all alone." Take away the so. Also you should add periods and commas. I am not big on spelling because, I myself, cannot spell but periods and commas at the end of poems are imporrtant. Nevertheless, you tried to get at people's hearts and you did a good job with that. It is impressive. I really liked what you did with this. It is a little over dramatic but still, very good. Thanks for submitting it.

  • cindyloo
    October 22, 2008

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    I am so touched by this poem. I have tears in my eyes. It is just beautiful. You are so truthful when you write about insecurities and lonliness. This poem shows how compassionate, kind and big- hearted you are. Even in your own pain, you reach out to help others. I am glad that Ben and Stephen pulled the strings to bring you and I together. They are laughing. They want us to get through this. We will because we will do it together. We have a special bond; our stories are almost identical. You inspire me and you help me more than you'll ever know. We will weep together and someday we will laugh together too. Thank you so much for this amazing poem. Words cannot even express how deeply it touched me. Love you and please never stop writing. I'll talk to you soon.