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the colour of arrival

 

 

 


it will redden.  you’ll see me –
through the heartbeat of the sun
I’ll come to you.
hello will sprout from morning’s

highest, bluest vase:  tulips,

yellow and long-stemmed,
like kites,
like joy.
it will soar (how high

is happiness?).
in my hand tomorrow
will shine,
rainbowed
with new beginnings.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 








 

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  • CarolDesjarlais silver member
    May 28
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    oops


  • CarolDesjarlais silver member
    May 28
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    Stunning write...breathtakingly beautiful! Congratulations and well-earned.


  • campanaro silver member
    March 24

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    Such a lovely write

    Nicolette this was beautiful simply beautiful.
    As always it's such a wonderful experience to read your gifted writing.Thank you.
    Take care
    as always
    Love Peace
    campanaro


  • individuality gold member
    March 20

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    ah the wonder of simple things like flowers, (well i say simple lightly, a botanist might argue with me they are complex!) beauty captured in the eyes, in the nose, the scents roaming the spirit. happiness - as high as love. a good poem.


  • natari gold member
    March 12

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    Gorgeous poetry that just falls from the lips. I feel like I just drank a glass of good wine.


    • Nicolette gold member
      March 12
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      thank you, Helen - i like the idea of a glass of good wine!


  • inder silver member
    February 6

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    rainbow strung across the heart!

    its almost 9 here... runing late for work... but I guess I will sling this rainbow across my back to colour the rest of the day... kudos ! and thanks for a shooting star in the morning!


  • LovelyTraces
    January 23

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    Very beautifully written. You speak so poetic (hard to believe..but that's getting kind of rare these days on here..) Your words were very purposeful and gentle. Great job and congratulations on the trophies! You deserved them!


  • thepoetssoul
    January 21

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    This is beautifully weaved in splendid colour and taste.You have brought the vase to life in such simplicity, Im in awe, absolutely fantastic piece of poetry.Be blessed in all you ever do.

    Tony


  • Jaden silver member
    December 27, 2008
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    Very nice.


  • Heath Thompson
    December 19, 2008

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    Oh my, you know I like your work. I'd by a book with nothing but this title in it! The Colour of Arrival - I need to sit down!!!!


  • Alyzeh
    December 3, 2008

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    Excellent write. I stand in awe. Wonderful!!! Your writes are so very brilliantly penned. I'm a fan already!!!

    Loved this one as well.

    Good luck always and congratulations on the trophies!
    Love
    Alyzeh


  • LimboticMistisos
    November 24, 2008

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    wow

    simply wonderful this is just wow....it's got me wondering now and my curiousity is peaked....but i must ask why need i look to the sky come the 11th of december


  • Stuart Higginson gold member
    November 21, 2008

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    You've woven another beauty here Nicolette I guess at this point I should say ... I'm back from my 2yr exile lol. Finally got the internet connected! I hope you're keeping well. It's good to see some familiar faces and talented pens are still at work on here

    Beautiful poem. It's somewhat polar to things I'm drafting at the moment, as I'm thoroughly in Xmas-and-winter mode, lol! All whites, silvers, indigos and blacks!

    The earliest lines of this one are stunning. The sense of spiritual presence - that you will be there, in the heartbeat of the sun ... a knowledge of "one's presence in spirit even if not in visible/physical form". There's always comfort if we look up, I guess because that's where there's light - by day the sun, by night the moon and stars! Sometimes even staring at a peaceful ebony night sky, or the clouds as they cross the morning light, can be enriching.

    Best wishes,
    Stu


  • Rhythm Child
    November 19, 2008
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    heartbeat of the sun

    absolutely beautiful
    two words that fit together perfectly


  • SabaSophiya
    November 17, 2008

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    Brilliant

    This is truly fabulous! A brilliant poetic thought, and an extremely nice choice of words!! They are like delicate brush strokes that have skillfully created a magically uplifting painting of delicate emotions in their purest forms!! I am glad I came across this!! Way to go.....


  • catnipmeow
    November 14, 2008
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    Fantastic

    rainbowed with new beginnings ........oh heres to that !!!


  • Luna Tique Fringe
    November 4, 2008
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    anticipation at its lovliest.


  • Heart Sutra
    November 1, 2008
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    very pretty and heart bursting...



  • nancy drew
    October 30, 2008
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    oh my gosh. this is just fabulous. need i say more?

    helen~


  • klassy lassy
    October 26, 2008

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    mmmm ....all I could hink of was sunshine when I read the title to this one, Nicci. For arrivals are usually accompanied by radiance and joy. All the primary colors abound in sunshine, and many more, but it takes a prism to refract the colors and a prism of heart to discern them, and I can think of no one who does that better that you. Such bloom!


    • Nicolette gold member
      October 27, 2008
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      your comments are always a joy to read and feel within the heart, Karen


  • Allyce May gold member
    October 25, 2008

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    "through the heartbeat of the sun"

    Sighhh, I knew what this would be about and it exceeded my expectations. I am so happy for you, and I will be thinking of you. You two deserve happiness.

    This is a beautiful poem.



  • leander Moderators member
    October 24, 2008

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    This poem is something fresh, something good to start the day with (although I still have slept, chronologically it's already a new day)...

    Makes me wonder what's happening that day in December?


  • Nangaleema
    October 24, 2008
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    this feels so fresh. i love the way it begins "it will redden." great read. - NANGALEEMA


  • owlish
    October 23, 2008

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    Beautiful take on the prompt, lovely descriptions, metaphors, similes, short but sweet and satisfying! "Through the heartbeat of the sun"... "hello will sprout from morning’s highest, bluest vase"... amazing. Can't say anything no one else has said, but this is worth a hundred golds, in my opinion!


  • Sonja
    October 22, 2008

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    Every day there is a shooting star bringing a miracle of colors to the light of my sky, I hope to see the fireworks on your trails too
    ~
    Beautiful ending:
    in my hand tomorrow
    will shine,
    rainbowed
    with new beginnings.

    Congratulations on silver.
    ~Sonja~

  • silverfish
    October 21, 2008

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    sweet poem, and interesting use of colors, especially complementary hues like blue and yellow, along with a green-stemmed winter flower and the warmest reds. the gold is in your pen. -silverfish


  • the atlantic
    October 21, 2008

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    stunning. i love the heartbeat of the sun. you cease to amaze me yet again nicolette. bravo


  • Lanara23
    October 21, 2008

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    I love your imagery, the simplicity of the language, the emotions that dwell inbetween each line. I loved it!! x

  • dx d by me
    October 21, 2008

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    I'm amazed at the textures you provide for this poor reader, so rich and pregnant with color, hope, delight, seems you have written JOY! Geo!


  • Room without doors gold member
    October 20, 2008

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    Outstanding

    This is very pretty with some great images. The tone is light and the poem is very inspirational focusing on joy and happiness and linking this with the natural beauty of tulips. A pleasure to read. Best of luck in the contest.


  • Randomly Beautiful
    October 20, 2008

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    How high is happiness? As far as one is willing to reach to achieve it. Beautiful poetry as always.

  • grm
    October 20, 2008

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    just reading again...and dreaming, dreaming, dreaming....


  • Grunts Girl silver member
    October 20, 2008
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    i loved the hope in this


  • Jersene gold member
    October 19, 2008

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    This is beautiful, Nicolette....I love all the colours. They seem to scream happiness, right through the centre of this love red background


    • Nicolette gold member
      October 19, 2008
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      Thank you, Jersene... yeah you are right about the "screaming"!


  • CaliOkie silver member
    October 19, 2008

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    Every line of this is just so perfect. This is your very best -- and everything you write is so good. This one just really captures the moment and the feeling and injects it into the heart of the reader -- like adrenaline, it got my heart going! And that intensity of emotion is all laid out gently, carefully, like flowers arranged in a vase.

    Wow. I'll be thinking of you on December 11 -- have a safe trip.

    Garrison


  • AJ Morelli gold member
    October 19, 2008
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    so pretty and hopeful


    al


  • sheltered
    October 19, 2008

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    i really love the imagery here
    seems to me that it could be just as effective
    with less words
    but that's the minimalist in me talking
    beautiful picture

    • Nicolette gold member
      October 19, 2008
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      ja..but it had to be 50 words for the contest (actually this was a much longer poem when i started writing it) - but yes, i love short powerful poetry too. thanks!


      • sheltered
        October 19, 2008
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        how did I miss that...
        mine must have been 150 words... lol


  • marc creamore
    October 19, 2008

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    Nicolette . . . I have marked December 11th on my calendar, knowing that I will be smiling on that day, no matter what else is going on in the world . . .


    • Nicolette gold member
      October 19, 2008
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      aaawh, thanks Marc... northern lights from the south on that day


  • Mari Goes gold member
    October 19, 2008

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    What a wonderful flight!
    You'll soar, land and soar again and again...


  • tara wilson gold member
    October 19, 2008

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    "you’ll see me –
    through the heartbeat of the sun
    I’ll come to you."


    this is sooo beautiful, Nic - what a lovely vase, the sky holds so much beauty & new dawns for you...I love this


  • Night Hope gold member
    October 19, 2008

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    Sighhh...You know I love you & everything you write. I told Guy that you are both writing more than ever now, because you inspire each other. I'm so happy for you both. I expect the skies over Oklahoma to become lavender on this wondrous night, my Sister. By the way, our seasons ARE opposite, ya know. So, don't show up wearin' shorts. ♥ Vlindertjie

    • Nicolette gold member
      October 19, 2008
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      i actually tried to work lavender into this, you know . lol, at the shorts - i actually want him to take me home with him . thanks, my Vlinder-friend

  • grm
    October 19, 2008
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    NOW who is using our conversations to write poetry?


    ja, nuwe beginne, liefie

    i'll be the one at the gate with flowers and bells

    lief vir jou, altyd

    • Nicolette gold member
      October 19, 2008

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      and look at the good Afrikaans!!!


      lol, yes. but i was actually thinking about this poem already when we talked - just gave you a sneek private preview, liefie


      and i'll be the one smiling walking towards you...

      lief vir jou


  • Mad Moon silver member
    October 19, 2008

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    Your words always bring such a smile to my heart, dear one. This is exquisite, as always for you.

    "...How high is happiness...." ...sigh....

    Again, I am left breathless and wanting more...


    Love you, dear friend!


    • Nicolette gold member
      October 19, 2008
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      ... you always make me smile, Mary Moon (and i have been smiling a LOT lately)


  • And Hyetal
    October 19, 2008

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    beautiful beautiful as always. You always make me smile even when I'm feeling blue, as usual.

    what's December 11th?

    ~Cassie


    • Nicolette gold member
      October 19, 2008
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      I'll arrive in the USA to visit Guy on Dec. 11th . thanks, Cassie


  • mayaa
    October 19, 2008

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    December 11th! Wow - I'm so happy for you, Nic! Such a wonderful poem too! I'm sure the day you look up to the skies, the stars shall all shine upon you. Such a beautiful poem!


    • Nicolette gold member
      October 19, 2008
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      jaaaa...less than 2 months now!!!! thank you, lovely one


  • Erica Carnea
    October 19, 2008

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    this is really good
    a fantastic write
    good luck in the comtest
    love always
    erica carnea
    xxxx

  • Rowan gold member
    October 19, 2008
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    doin a happy dance...

  • Yvette Champ gold member
    October 19, 2008

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    So subtle, the title used as the first step into the poetry with the colour of arrival...it immediately adds the beauty of an awakening...deftly you marry your own nature with imagery of all that is natural within nature and yes...yes...yes...from the palm that is open your pure poetry gifts the dance that has begun...no measure is made of the heighth of happiness...just the ability to grow into the space that it is found...beautifully written...enabling the reader to bear witness with all the joy of a bystander viewing something special that touches the heart...

    • Nicolette gold member
      October 19, 2008
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      I know i have said this so often but even your comments are so very poetic, Yvettte. Thank you so much for your light


  • MJ Donnelly gold member
    October 19, 2008

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    I anticipate a dawn
    and all that comes
    with a loving heart
    bringing flowers
    as I smile.

    As always Nicky, this was lovely.


    mj.


  • iverbthenoun
    October 19, 2008
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    this is wonderful! i love the simple and sweet air of this one!


  • arafura gold member
    October 19, 2008
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    Beautiful! Your words are special.


  • ariazephyrzoe gold member
    October 19, 2008

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    breathtaking

    this stirs vibrant feelings, blush, warmth, refreshing dews, sunshine...

    South Africa, you made it my dream place. I've stumbled upon Bruce's page too, painted SA's beauty just like this.

    Wow on SA skies


    Anna Lee


    • Nicolette gold member
      October 19, 2008
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      thank you, Anna Lee yes, SA skies are beautiful, but in December it will be the USA skies

  • piggyback
    October 19, 2008

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    Aww. Makes me remember my old little "oh-how-good-it'll-be-to-meet-you" poems. Hehe. This is gorgeous... The first few lines and the kites and the height of happiness (nice alliteration, too). You definitely depict the excitement. Just wow. One of your best, I'm sure. I feel the love and anticipation in it...


    • Nicolette gold member
      October 19, 2008
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      my turn to say aaawh, diana. thank you - yes, definately love and anticipation here


  • Peteskid gold member
    October 19, 2008

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    bright sun in these lovely words, and so the light and warmth makes miracles all around us...beautiful poetry here...PK...


  • fortyninereasons gold member
    October 19, 2008

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    this is beautiful. I have lost my voice trying to get Chez to change her mind
    Juls


    • Nicolette gold member
      October 19, 2008
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      thanks, Juls Jaaa.. i've even tried to bribe her with an invitation to visit Africa again...


      • fortyninereasons gold member
        October 19, 2008
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        If we had enough money to fit Africa in, we would. Africa will be our next trip


        • Nicolette gold member
          October 19, 2008
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          Let me know when you take that Africa-trip - come down south!


  • Cannonsfire
    October 19, 2008

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    Smiles all around for this and just as a tulip should be described...a wonder of nature and emotions. Just one to sigh over. C


    • Nicolette gold member
      October 19, 2008
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      you caught me while i was still editing, Chez ....these flowers are for you too

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