You were born with wings
wrapped translucent
around your naked skin
waiting to unfurl-
to fly away
though we ached to have you stay.
You were born with wings
so we tethered you with tubes
IV's and ventilators
NG tubes and oxygen
labwork and broviacs
surgeries and suctioning
and finally blood...
so much blood.
You were born with wings
and we tried to tear them off
watching in horror
the times they opened wide-
holding tiny hands
as though we held your soul
sitting at your side.
You were born with wings
but at last you grew strong
and when your wings slipped off,
they whispered to the ground
lost
in a pile of cloudy x-rays,
and we found
it wasn't lines that kept you,
but the hand of God himself.
What did you think
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Only yesterday, my sister gave birth to my first nephew. It was a difficult preganancy and we were so worried there were be something as there have been problems before, but he was born stronger than we thought, despite being seven weeks premature.
This poem conveys the pain, worry and raw emotion of a parent in this situation, and is extremely beautiful in imagery and language. So delicately written, almost like a whisper. It is no short of perfect and I hope you never change anything in it.
If you don't mind, could I show my sister if I get access to a computer later? I know she'd love it, I might wait til she's feeling less emotional though.
Very well done and please keep writing,
Hugs,
Jess x
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this is absolutely wonderful. i had a preemie but, fortunately and by the grace of God, she is now eighteen years old. i remember all the struggles though and my heart goes out to those who deal with this subject. thank you for sharing this with me today and i am looking forward to reading more from you in the near future. viyanna rosemarie
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Life is very fragile...more so when newly born.
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GASP!!
Oh this is heartwrenching! Has it anything to do with kids/babies? Heartbreaking! Im in tears. Very powerful. Please take some time to read some of my work tthough mine seems sort of watered down after this.
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AWESOME!
This has to be the best poem of inspiration yet. Your poem flowed flawlessly as if that matters because the content blew me away. I had to read it 3 times it was so touching. I am so happy this ended so happily. God bless you!
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Beauitful!
Very beauitful in my opinion i agree with the rest when they say your visuals are fantastic. Nice good Poem
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That was so beautifully sad, it made me shudder. Critically, the use of repetition is perfect, not annoying and overwhelming, and it reiterates an important point. The visuals are fantastically crafted, especially in the first and second stanzas.
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this is a good poem i enjoyed the read
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I take it you had a premi. in the family...I've got a poem "Life Bubble" from the other side of perspective...This is lovely; the tone, the descriptions, everything about it. The enjambment works well and the diction was very well chosen. Nicely done. Peace
, Dannie
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