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I pierced silk skies
in soprano shrieks;

singing satisfaction
he knows my grave.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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Picture Credit: http://belle-a-dawna.deviantart.com/art/Come-With-Me-101116451

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  • Manda Kathryn Greeters member
    November 1, 2008

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    I actually found myself smiling at the last part; not sure why but I think it was the satisfaction
    Great take

  • Manda Kathryn Greeters member
    November 1, 2008
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    Thank You for Your Entry


  • lowercase prelude gold member
    October 21, 2008

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    Excellent use of dark imagery and emotions
    You painted quite an image with it, aside from the one already attached.

    Excellent


  • Alyzeh
    October 20, 2008

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    Whattay (read as what a) piece by you. Love it. This is brilliant! Excellent take on the prompt!

    Goodluck


  • echo-ink
    October 19, 2008

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    x =


    always...Mum xx


  • Reptile Lady gold member
    October 19, 2008

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    Powerful to the point
    The feelings are painful
    Best wishes hun
    Julie


  • badnovocaine
    October 19, 2008

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    This totally took the breath out of me. Just the first line alone is powerful enough to send me on my feet! Very expressive indeed.
    Good luck to you in the contest.


  • chilali
    October 19, 2008

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    GREAT take on the prompt! This should do very well in the contest!! Good luck


  • crimsondew
    October 18, 2008

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    Wonderful

    Love how you sued 'soprano' ...quite innovative here

    All the best dear

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