The audience is ready now,
they shuffle as she takes a bow,
while scanning faces row upon row,
she’s heady.
Curtain is up and lights dipped low,
the orchestra is warmed to the glow,
she tests the strings with a willow bow,
tuned, ready.
Stomping a bare foot on the ground
they execute a wailing sound,
with graceful glee she spins around
to weathered boards no longer bound.
Free to fly
She leaps into a Celtic dance,
almost a jig, almost a prance,
her ribbon dress is pure romance.
The onlookers are held entranced,
at gleeful cry
As stick and fiddle flaunt her air,
static lifts her flame red hair
a fiddle and its fiddler pair,
keeping the beat with skill and flair.
Lend syncopation to every chair.
They’re in it,
The theatre is going wild,
Its hard to tell its just a child
held so many hearts beguiled.
For just three minutes
A contest entry
- TRIPLETS ~ painlessly! #133 Allpoetry invited by Lyndon.
3500 points, ended October 31, 2008, 18 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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stilll laughing
She leaps into a Celtic dance,
almost a jig, almost a prance,
her ribbon dress is pure romance,
the onlookers are held entranced,
at gleeful cry
love it
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What a beautiful creation you have here, I felt tones of celtic in this piece and it left me with a smile. Best to you
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This is an amazing poem about dancing
... I really love the imagery that you have and the pure adrenaline of the last couple of stanzas - nicely done!
Keep writing
Polly
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Very well done. You give a pace to the poem through your imagery. I can imagine this little one flying with passion of the dance and entrancing all who watch her.
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Thank you wolf.
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Like this form of poetry - great verses you have written here with wonderful flow, rhythm and rhyme as well. Liked the presentation, background too. Simplistic and we can put all our attention on the words written.
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Thank you Gran.
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Outstanding
I liked how you created the atmosphere in this- I could see her on stage playing the fiddle and the audience getting carried away by her talent. I thought this was a complex rhyme scheme to attempt and that you succeeded very well - the poem has good flow. Best of luck in the contest
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Thank you for commenting, I am glad you liked it.
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Nice flow and a very optimistic set of stanzas very nicely done all round
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Thank you Jeff, not sure what you mean by optomistic, but then, that is how I am .
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Star struck!
Wow! So good. Rhythm, rhyme , flow, meter...it's all there telling of a magical moment on the stage. There's nothing I didn't love about this write. Your choice of words were so befitting the mood you created. This reminds me of ballet, and how it takes many years of practice to achieve a seemingly effortless display of skill, and so it is here...alby
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Thank you alby for the fantastic commenting, glad you enjoyed it.
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