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Fuck Me He Says (ADULT)

Fuck me...he says

 

adrenaline rush
between my thighs

crocked smile snaring 

from side to side
on licking lips

 

a nervous habit often
misinterpreted as

seductive but not

 

a thirty second slide

show of my trashiest 
content scrolls through

my head as I consider

my options  exhaling

arrogant smoke rings

crushing out my

cigarette

"hey lover could you

fix me a drink...

I'm gonna do some

writing  before dinner ok?"

 

ok maybe a couple of

minutes pass  before

I pick up my pen and

confidently touch it to

my blank page

einie meini minie...

 

fuck me he says...HA

 

I guess he didn't know

who'd be doing his  

deflowering 

fucking the english language

out of him

unable to read by the time

I've had my say with him

 

another snared smile

licks my lips...knowing

 

and then I decide

enough for today

don't feel much like writing

anymore 

 

too bad for him

could have been a hell of a write 

In a list

A contest entry

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  • sheltered
    January 4
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    now i remember
    this kicks ass and thanks again


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    November 7, 2008
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    LOL..what to say other than this is absolutely awesome!!! Congrats on the Gold!


  • Riamh
    October 26, 2008
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    This is some kick-ass piece of writing! Well done!

    S


  • cricketjeff gold member
    October 24, 2008

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    Superb!
    And, rest assured, it was "a hell of a write"!

    Great stuff


    • nevadapoet
      October 24, 2008
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      Thank you so much for the welcome comments and the read. They mean alot coming from you.
      Be Well,
      Shelly


  • Swan song gold member
    October 23, 2008
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    Wow!!!!! This is something! intenseto say the least!!!!


    • nevadapoet
      October 24, 2008
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      Thank you so much...glad you liked the intensity.
      Shelly


  • Dalaney gold member
    October 23, 2008

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    woohoo! Congrats Shelly! I loved this poem when I read it. In fact, it made me want to enter the contest You outdid yourself with such a clever and fun write. Lane

    • nevadapoet
      October 24, 2008
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      Thanks so much Lane, glad you liked. Isn't it interesting, when I sat down to write this I said to myself...how would Lane approach this? Yes it was fun and clever, but I had your talent to inspire me. Thank you for that.
      Shelly


      • Dalaney gold member
        October 24, 2008
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        Shelly, that means more to me than a trophy or points any day thank you so much.


  • Cannonsfire
    October 23, 2008

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    Way to go Shelly, congrats on your trophy! C


  • Mrs LadyEnthralling
    October 19, 2008

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    splendid! this is so gold Artist you brought a lot of skills and creation to the table and you kept in mind that you are in a competition. This is what I call a can't touch this piece I am so positive its gold good luck to you in the contest


    • nevadapoet
      October 24, 2008
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      You called this one...thanks a bunch for the read and the appreciation for the write.
      Shelly


  • sheltered
    October 19, 2008
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    lol

    you really fucked me good
    damn, i've been had by the best... lol

    • nevadapoet
      October 24, 2008
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      Aren't you the slick one. No hard feelings huh? Glad you like it and thanks so much for the gold trophy....never been officially given a trophy for fuckin before...although

      Thanks
      Shelly

      • sheltered
        October 24, 2008
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        you've likely been a trophy
        for fuckin' before though
        and didn't even realize it... lol
        oh yea, we sit around and compare
        trophies and scars quite often
        my mantle is a little bare
        so I made a couple of replicas to place there

        • nevadapoet
          October 24, 2008
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          maybe I've realized it all to well...maybe that's why this write was so much fun for me.
          Sorry your mantle is bare...I do find that hard to believe...I've read your work...it's brillant. I saw you got a new trophy the other day...from Bear....and I just a HM
          you don't fool me...I'll be watching.

    • nevadapoet
      October 19, 2008
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      Shame on you...I hope you appreciated my attempt to not flatter your arrogant ego. I read some of the other entries, giving you exactly what you asked...I'm sure that was enough to stroke you. I wasn't gonna be one of them.
      Clever idea however, if I do say so myself.
      Shelly

  • Sint
    October 19, 2008

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    * he says, no apostrophe

    some punctuation would be a good addition, too, as I don't think that you've mastered meter well enough to go without it

    • nevadapoet
      October 19, 2008
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      Yes, you are probably right. I was writing out of instinct...didn't put alot of effort into it or consider it to be worth the extra effort. I was teasing the arrogant ego of the contest host, not wanting to give him what he obviously thought he would get from the contest.
      I appreciate your constructive comments and the read.
      Shelly


  • DreamCatcher6
    October 18, 2008
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    wow..very nice


    • nevadapoet
      October 19, 2008
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      Thanks for reading...I appreciate it, especially considering the graphic nature of the write.

  • Cannonsfire
    October 18, 2008
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    LOL Oh my this is amazing from you, where on earth did this come from?? And forget it, this is a hell of a write!

    • nevadapoet
      October 19, 2008
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      Your funny..."this is amazing from you"...does my writing appear so stuffy that I wouldn't have it in me? I like that actually...perception is reality right?
      I'm glad you liked it...it was fun writing it...I wanted to tease his ego for being so arrogant. I think it worked...huh?

      Thanks for your support...I'll miss you wehen you're gone.
      Shelly

      • Cannonsfire
        October 19, 2008
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        LOL Shelly, Not stuffy, just so very different from your sensual pieces and yes you certainly have teased him with this, although he is actually kind of shy but don't tell him I told you that lol....and perception is a definite reality lol as long as its the right reality Oh I won't be far away when I am gone....I've enjoyed your company.

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