your breath smells of
water-colors
like reds and yellows and blues
you punch me
and my face goes numb
and my heart-
it’s nowhere to be found
I stare upwards
I look at the stars
I wonder
where’d we all come from?
then I see a flash of silver
and hear a crack of rib
it’s mine, I’ll find in the morning
but not know, I do not know
I’m flat on my back
and I don’t know how I got there
but all is okay
until I feel your hand on my hip
then
and only then
do I begin to scream
*later*
I’m lying in the gutter
don’t know where I am
raising my head takes effort
I don’t bother this time
moving only my eyes
I look up at the stars
and I remember
with a strange vagueness
thinking
of UFOs and babies
I curl into a ball
(but only in my mind,
my body is too sore to move)
tears fall from my eyes
now that you are too far away to see
but quickly they dry
for you may yet return
pushing to my feet
I fight the waves of nausea
and the last think I think
before I hit the ground again is this-
“I loved you then
but I feel nothing now
I am stronger than this”
but when you pick me up in your arms
I do not fight
I do not cry
I do not scream
I let myself be carried back to Hell
Author notes
breath, water-colors, blues, punch, numb, silver, crack, flat, hip, gutter, curl
Dirty and Broken
sorry if it's not what u wanted, i tried
A contest entry
- the way we fall. by aanika.
990 points, ended November 24, 2008, 22 entries
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i loved the way you used the wordbank.
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stare upwards
I look at the stars
I wonder
where’d we all come from?
and this part
I’m lying in the gutter
don’t know where I am
raising my head takes effort
I don’t bother this time
moving only my eyes
I look up at the stars
and I remember
such great imagery doll i loved it bunches i wish you only the best in the contest mucho love
vanna
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I am in full agreeance with Christopher.
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holy. fucking. god.
dayyyyyyyyyyyuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuummmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm.
fucksake.
shit.
AH!
this is so...gah. fucking-amazing.
i...just wow.
ps: just for all yee nay-sayers out thurr, my reaction really needed to be typed like that. =]
YOUFUCKINGROCK!
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good point. she's flipping AMAZING!
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true. true. we need to build a shrine to her name...just because, ya know, she's pretty much worth it.
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wow, This is so sad, so determined, but in the end she gives up. It is too upsetting to come to terms with. Hopefully one day she will get the nerve to run, and never look back. Beautiful write!
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