When the going get's tough, tough just isn't enough,
Just when you thought you subscribed it,
It just doesn't seem like you had the right stuff.
Devoured pride seems to be the outcome of your fate,
A reopened safe, opened..., a little too late.
Key seems within possession with productive progression,
Uncover the correction that produces your inner sanctum.
Engulfed in a phoenix of deception,
And so you sulk, with no guaranteed respiration,
Elevated to break handcuffs, laces not yet lacened.
Correction, so maybe you do have the right stuff,
But when the going get's tough, tough..., just isn't enough.
A contest entry
- What is your definition of a LOSER???? PW..PW..PW Maybe it's you yourself. by echo-ink.
470 points, ended October 21, 2008, 14 entries
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What's the first (1st) thought that came across you're mind when you finished reading this poem?
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Tres bien!
C'est un absolument magnifique poème! J'aime combien d'émotion et comment ils semblent 'vous voler' dehors et vous renverser. C'est vraiment un magnifique poème et j'espère que vous continuez à écrire.
Renatta
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I don't know why the word "stuff" is so hated in literature, it still works in enough situations.. And I think it was good placement in your poem, which is very good by the way.
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Chance
Chance is that tough is sometimes overrated and the wiser person wins out. Inbetween the world of shallow passages lies, somewhere a person above the ret.
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Endurance. I thought the poem really picked up in the middle of it. You seemed to get into the groove of it and started playing with the words a bit more, which I thought was amazing, especially your use of alliteration. Have you considered revising the beginning, specifically your rhyme of "stuff"? I thought it kind of threw off the creative elements of the rest of the poem.
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Very interesting write.
The tough have to be even tougher,
UGH!
Bell, xx
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