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Is it you

I have this secret
A secret so deep
The kind that makes fire
burn through my cheeks
The kind where my heart,
it skips a few beats
the kind where my knees
get wobbly and weak
I have this secret
and when i look in your eyes
I see mines
Like one of those connections
you see on tv
The definition of love?
you plus me
But NO this can't be.
I dont belong to you,
and you dont belong to me
They say follow your heart
And what's in it is true.
I belong to him
but my heart's screaming you
I value our friendship
More than life
If loving you is wrong
than to hell with what's right
They say follow my heart,
and I think i always knew
That all along..
It took me to you

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  • Stevie.me
    July 23

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    Great Expression of Love

    Great Expression of Love to a friend. I Love some of my friends then girlfriends I've had. Some friends are easy to fall in love with, but that's ok.


  • Michelle-Elizabeth
    May 23
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    This is a nice poem I like it. It flows and rhymes good, with a hint of teenage thinking in it. You described the feeling well. Some pretty strong emotion there.

    "If loving you is wrong
    than to hell with what's right"

    Love that part
    Keep writing thanks for entering, and best wishes


  • Kristin93
    April 26

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    I really enjoyed this poem,
    Your writing has the effect to make others feel as you do and that is powerful. YOu turned my night around, thanks.


  • Umi Juvariel
    April 9

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    Love is indeed a secret until it is shared with that one person. I enjoyed this write very much. Excellent write and good luck in my contest.


  • Blue-Rose Beauty gold member
    March 30
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    I really like it.


  • Blue-Rose Beauty gold member
    March 30
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    Nice.

  • poets whisper silver member
    February 16
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    thanks for entering


  • Loveberry
    February 1

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    Awh so cute! only suggestion- change 'than to hell with right' to 'then to hell with what's right'... i think it flows a tad bit better, but other than that, LOVED it!

    • Emotional-wreck
      February 2
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      thanks!

      you were totally right. "with what's right" sounds better. thanks for that! and thanks for loving my poem i apprciate it!

  • piccola silver member
    October 20, 2008

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    The rhyme scheme is good and so is the flow. It follows the theme of the contest which is secret love too. Thank you for entering ... oh I meant to ask, did you mean to spell right the way you did? (rite)

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