The day you washed ashore
inundated and lifeless,
my world ceased to exist
Clouds fermented my wounded heart
as spiraling reflections
raced through my thoughts
I gaze into obscurity
despondent and bleak,
remembering days of passion
and granduer when we bathed
in the glory of an affectionate sun
Our souls were tied like
the waves of the sea,
forever immortal
I am but a shadow cast upon
the sands awaiting my own
demise
Yearning to be with you again,
for life has robbed me of
your tender devotion
Sweet sweet lady of my desire
I weep for you,
haunted by soft fragile hands
that linger above the shoreline
of a broken heart
A contest entry
- Picture Inspired by ennovy.
700 points, ended October 31, 2008, 15 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Soft, painful, emotional write. Brilliant metphor and your imagery is beyond the pale; you inspire your readers to think of things past and present. Well done.
Good luck in the contest, and thanks for entering.
Novy & Brazos -
So tender, loving and emotional...your imagery is in full overtime.........Thank you for entering our contest...Novy & Brazos
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sir, you have gained a fan!
i adore you!
This poem is just as wonderous as the last of yours i read, and i'm starting to wonder if genius is just sortof your style.
Endings of poems are always a point of focus, but putting that aside, i truly loved yours. it connected well with the image, and the voice that read it in my mind sounded so sad.
This part was my personal favorite:
Clouds fermented my wounded heart
as spiraling reflections
raced through my thoughts
I gaze into obscurity
despondent and bleak,
remembering days of passion
and granduer when we bathed
in the glory of an affectionate sun
what a wordsmith you are. -
this is amazingly beautiful and i love the wording in it.^^ great job ^^ good luck in the contest.
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DAMN!!
Outstanding and beautiful! This my friend is a 'work of ART'
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I really like this poem it is very deep.
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This is such a charming, emotion-filled, amazing poem! The imagery and after-thoughts are fantastic!
I especially liked:
"Our souls were tied like
the waves of the sea,
forever immortal
I am but a shadow cast upon
the sands awaiting my own
demise."
Wonderful, keep writing!
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WOW! This is full of emotion and the words that you used were great. Good luck in the contest
Clouds fermented my wounded heart
as spiraling reflections
raced through my thoughts
haunted by soft fragile hands
that linger above the shoreline
of a broken heart
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