she’s just barely sixteen
and she already struggles with finding her place.
boundaries are just limits
that need to be erased
and she’ll do anything to get what she wants.
music is more than life itself,
like a skeleton that holds up
everything that she has ever known.
she’s just a girl, that loves
the sound of the raindrops falling down, hard
on the ground is one of the simplest things
in life that she enjoys
because it makes her feel not alone in the world,
this loneliness caused by you who broke her heart.
the sound of the loudest thunder
and brightest lightning storm
is a realization that she’s only human,
and still insignificant to the entire world,
but to me she’s my second half
and I’ll always be there for her.
Author notes
this is a poem I wrote for/about my friend Jennifer.
hope it's alright.
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ap name: mesmerized--x
Option 7:
Write a poem about or to your best friend.
In a list
A contest entry
- i swear i'd burn the city down to show you the light by stylization.
650 points, ended October 25, 2008, 13 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Thanks for your entry. Good luck in the contest
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Nice job. Congratulations on the bronze. Jennifer is lucky to have such a friend. thank you for entering
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wow!!!
amazing
you just can write
and damn
grr
haha
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This is amazing. I love the wonderfully described imagery and I could see the scenes playing out before my eyes. It's so sweet and it's amazingly done. Best of luck, thanks so much for entering.
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thanks for the trophy & comment <333
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awwww you wrote a poem for jenn
did you show her?
she’s just a girl, that loves
the sound of the raindrops falling down, hard
on the ground is one of the simplest things
in life that she enjoys
that confused me :|
the first three lines didn't make sense lol.
she loves the sound of rain falling down hard on the ground is one of the simplest things... ???
lol I still don't get it.
music is more than life itself,
like a skeleton that holds up
everything that she has ever known.
lovelovelove that though.
this is beautiful
she's lucky to have you.
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lol she gets it
and ya i showed her.. shes writing me one also lol -
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and theres a comma which like seperated the sentence into 2 parts
so it does make sense.. at least for me haha
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this is beautiful
sometimes it takes a friend's encouragement to keep us going
wonderful poem
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