She’s so beautiful
I just had to explore
the possibilities of it all
She’s agnostic
I’ve been saved
for years
She thanks
herself
I thank Christ
She scours the filth
left by awful memories
I preserve them
in glad-wrap
for poetry
She shines in astrology
I rain in praise
(Sometimes)
She gives sex in abundance
(For many people)
I know my sex
is a covenant
She believes in
same sex attraction
I think
Oh hell no
(But I’ll watch you indulge)
She feels like
a woman molting layers
of society grown standards
I feel like
a man in decayed patches
of hopeless skin
Sewn by threads
of stress fallen hair
She says
lovemaking
while slicing her name
in my chest
with a box cutter
brings her to
the ultimate climax
I say
“It’s time for me to go now --
You crazy bitch”
Author notes
I want this one to be about a person who has really made an impact on your life. I don't care if the impact was good or bad, hurtful or inspiring, I just want to know what they did for you and how they did it.
Please be descriptive. I want to feel as though I know the person.
A contest entry
- Write about a person. by samantha jean.
600 points, ended October 31, 2008, 28 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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shattered...
no straight lines here. the best written poetry is written with squiggly lines and underlying penetration - as unnerving as crazy arm on a seismograph. this drops the jar of homilies on the hard ground underfoot and scatters them in all directions.
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lol, why thank u! you just made what most people call "weird" and turned it in to something interesting, and for that im honored! im just used to hearing "Its weird, doesnt sound right!"
thanks for taking the time to read it, means a lot to me. much love -
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in my opinion, autodidacts make the best poets - i know because i'm one as well. there are no inhibitions to trap us. keep learning and continue writing - it's in your blood. Lane Smith has a keen eye for formidable talent, but she's been infected by "higher learning". it's all good - strengths and weaknesses in all of us.
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this is good, really good.
. It has the emotional connection and texture that are essential for good poetry. I can see why Dalaney showcased you. I'm glad i clicked on your page.
.silverArcher.
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you are so awesome! thanks for sending me a comment, and for taking the time to read my work, that in itself means so much. thank u.
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yea, i know i'm awesome
. and you're welcome.
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You Are Gifted! I've said it before and I say it again. Wonderful, Fantastic, Amazing Write!!!!
Good luck in the contest and God Bless, Jo-Ann
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OMG thank u! that is such an honor coming from you and i am all smiles! thank u so much for the wondeful comment
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I have literally stumbled upon your poetry...I don't know quite what to say without sounding like I am gushing, so I will tell you that I've put you on my favorites list because I look for poetry like yours...I need it. You have something worthwhile to say, and you do it in a way I can understand.
I have read your poetry from a 'visitor's' view - this is the first poem I have commented on just because I can't keep
my thoughts to myself anymore
You are gifted with a true pen, dear Poet. Love, Lane
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You seemed to carry love and hate for this individual. Incredibly expressed. I love your ability to deliver such a punch with so few words, your work doesn't flow into me, it dives in and demands to be paid the attention it deserves.
Wonderfully penned.
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WOW, so u met her too? LOL , it wasnt a boxcutter but yeah, nuff said bout that.
"She scours the filth
left by awful memories
I preserve them
in glad-wrap
for poetry" - brilliant!
there is so much raw openness in this wordcraft, very moving, and yet sprinkled with witty humour that could only be spawned from real life and its strange windings.
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Purely amazing.
Thank you so much for entering my contest.
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