We spoke briefly
hours ago
You said you were busy
and would call me back
Now I wait
reflecting
on the picture of you and I
framed by a once bare wall
I wait
until outside noise
becomes a soft melody
I wait
until the stalk of night
shrouds the muffled cries
of my lonely soul
I wait
until my eyes adjust
and darkness is but a tint
Suppressing pride
I call you back
You claim
you had forgotten
Only a few days ago
you claimed
To love me
Now today
you forget to call –
Fuck you
Author notes
Word Prompt: Fuck Me
A contest entry
- Fuck me by sheltered.
700 points, ended October 23, 2008, 18 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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You seem a little hostile. I'm hoping this isn't based on truth. I personally don't celebrate sweetest day or valentines day cause it's just a way for society to get more money out of you. If you really love someone you don't just show them love that one day you try and show them everyday. That's how I feel anyway.
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I thought only Ohioans celebrated "Sweetest Day". It originated here, and is not for the reasons people think.
Yeah! That one deserve "Fuck You"! Either that or there's a severe case of Alzheimer's (sp) going on in the mind. LOL Truly!
Great work my friend! I felt the impatience and nail biting tension you've written here.
The best to you in the contest.
Much Love ♥
Renee
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I know that feeling, I hate it, too bad "fuck you" never seems to stick
Anyhow once again, truly enjoyed.
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if she's that hard to get
chances are she's no prize anyway
great imagery
you made that feeling of waiting for the phone to ring
come alive
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I like this poem and it's a great take on the prompt.
Love the lines and depth of feeling in.."shrouds the muffled cries of my lonely soul"
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Nice twist, wondered how you would end it.
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I loved this great take on the prompt! Good luck in the contest
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thanks a lot for coming by and checkin it out, and taking the time to leave a comment.
Much love & respect
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