The lights are blinding in this room
Where is the dimmer at?
And who are these men dressed in blue,
Wearing white face masks?
Coming at me with their tubes,
Needles and catheter
Please tell me this, what did I do
And just what are you after?
Riding down the road
The last thing I remember
Just trying to get home
Freezing cold, it was almost December
And how was I to know
That night should have been my last
The other driver slow
And me, I was going too fast
My ears just won't stop ringing
And my eyes are swollen shut
What the hell is that beeping?
It's driving me crazy, but
I think it means my heart's still beating
And I guess that's a plus
Now if they'd just stop the bleeding
Because survival is a must
Sometimes the fight for your life
Isn't even made by you
I was heading towards the light
But the doctors, they came through
Don't think that living is a right
It's merely a privilege
And think of that late at night
When making your driving decisions
Please tell me what you think
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Wow this is awsome, driving is a prilidge how truee that is. Thank you for sharing and it was a pleasure to read.
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this is a great write, it holds so much truth, its good to have poems coming from this angle for a change, people having second chances, i think saometimes that is more of a wake up call than the all too common story of loss. i really like the imagery in this write, great piece
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Thank you kindly
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I almost died when I was two. I can understand where you are coming from. We all are survivers.
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Hmmm that really was a beautiful piece to read I enjoyed it a lot. The flow is something great and the message hidden in it is also very nice. I loved theselines especially:
"Don't think that living is a right
It's merely a privilege
And think of that late at night
When making your driving decisions"
Well it's so true and so beautifully woven that I really am impressed. That has horror, imagery, flow, truth, uniqueness, what else u need lol. Keep on penning these amazing thoughts.
~~~~GOOD LUCK~~~~
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Thank you so much for your comment
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FANTASTIC
Thats a beautiful poem.
Yet so true.
The way you wrote this allows you to see it in your mind.
Very vivid.
I love it,
And
keep up the great work.
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SUPER STEVE!!!
How come I have not read this yet? I usually read everything you write as soon as you post it!!! This was familiar.. I've been through something similiar, I am not trying to diminish anything, just letting you know I can relate!!! Great write! Keep In Touch -
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I don't know WHY you hadn't read this yet! Hmph! lol
Good to see ya hun
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Amazing.
You are brilliant.
I cannot believe that I haven't read this til now.
What an honest piece, with a clear and sensible message to others.
I'm glad that they came through..
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This poem was filled with wonderful imagery. I could see a mental image all the way through, and it takes great talent to do that...nicely done
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This has left me speechless, what can a person say without giving some thought to this?
This here is an eye opener to a very serious and critical situation and was worded and the story was told just wonderfully. Simply an amazing scribe! Bravo!
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Thank you for your comment tips hat - Steve
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I can't even imagine. Damn good poetry and scary as hell, too.
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Thanks for your comment hun **
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Wow babe, that just made me have a really freaking flash of what kind of pain you must've had to go throguh, no good! I'm glad you're still alive. Seriously that's some hardcore shit, and I'm sorry you had to endure it.
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Wow. Powerful indeed.
I especially like the end, I believe it to be true. When it's decided, your life is gone. Better to live it as if there's no tomorrow, because in a flash it could be gone.
I think you've penned this one well... there was emotion and definite imagery. You painted the picture well. I could just see a person laying there on the hospital bed...covered in blood, hooked up to all kinds of machines, a swarm of doctors and nurses surrounding them....
Simply Awesome.
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Wow. Just. Wow.
a) I was excited to sign on and see a new piece from you.
This was amazing. Well worth the wait.
c) I envy you.
KBYE.
<3
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