I need to find a little box,
so no one else can see.
Hide my broken heart,
throw away the key.
Never want to love again,
nor feel deep felt pain.
Must hide my heart away,
or surely go insane.
To love with all my heart,
was my biggest mistake.
Cried many tears for you,
much more then I can take.
When I place my heart into,
the box will hold my sorrow.
All this love I feel for you,
will no longer hurt tomorrow.
Locked away forever more,
in a box, my heart, my pain,
Never to be opened again,
rusted from tear filled rain.
In a list
A contest entry
- SAD Poetry--- Let Me Have Your Best by Ativan.
900 points, ended November 2, 2008, 22 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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O my this is such a heart felt poem. Talented and truely catchs the readers hidden heartbreaks well done good luck for the contest your a sure winner
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I enjoy the image of the box. You took a frequently done subject and added a little uniqueness to it. However, I still feel it is not one of a kind which is what you should be shooting for. I also do not think it is worth 28 Applauses. Yet, I do think it is good. The pattern is nice and the flow is good. Despite the problems, I really enjoy the poem and I thank you for entering it. You are going to be on the finalist list
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Very well written. A beautifully touching poem...from beginning to end.
Fits well into the contest of SAD Poetry !!
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Thank You
I appreciate you stopping by and reading. Take care, Sandy
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Wow such a beautiful and heartfelt write. Just amazing in everyway. Good luck in the contest my dear friend. hugs Theresa
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Lovely Comment
Thank You for the nice comment. You take care. Sandy
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You've written this well Sandy... I can feel each word for I have been at this place you write of before... if only that little box worked! I swore that I would never love again... and so far, I've held myself to that promise.
This is an excellent piece, very sad, very emotional. I wish you the best in this contest.
~Melissa
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Great Comment
Thank you Melissa. Your comment was lovely and most appreciated. Take care. Blessings, Sandy
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This is truly a wonderful penned work. The rhyme tie quatrain together and flow smoothly without the feeling being forced. The reader is carried through the essence of a broken heart, so sadly. The narrator will save the heart by locking it away safe from pain. Nice work, good luck with the contest.
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Wonderful Comment
Thank you Dan. I always enjoy your thoughtful words on my poetry. Hugs and Smiles.
Bless You,
Sandy
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Sigh you always bring so much feelings to your writes, you always leave me with the deepest of sighs..
Thanks for sharing,
Warm thoughts.
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Thank You Tearz,
Always nice when you stop by. Take care. Sandy
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tear filled agony, you write it from your heart and say it so well. Hang in there girl for it is better to love and loose than to never have loved at all. You are in my prayer and thoughts.
Tamara
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Thank You Tamara
Always a delight when you stop by. Hope alll is well with you. Hugs and Smiles.
Bless You,
Sandy
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Sad
Such a beautifuly written piece yet so sad
I believe that we all can relate to your words at some point in our lives. Life can be cruel and hurtful, but there is always hope. For every tear a rainbow of love is near by.
Wish you the best in the contest
Lovely image as well
Take care
Many blessings
David
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Hello Dear David
So nice to read your lovekly comment. Always so nice to se you drop by. Big hugs and Smiles to a sweet friend. Take care. Love to you and Amanda.
Blessings,
Sandy
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Sad
this poem was full of sadness, thank you Sandy for sharing a piece of my heart so well written and the flow was beautifull,
Many blesings Sandy
Rend
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Thank You Rend
I so appreciate your very nice comment. Thank you for stopping by and reading.
Take care.
Sandy
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SO , SO SAD!!!!!!!!!
Oh how I have felt this exact same way!
The depths a broken heart can fall into 's
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Beautiful Comment
Thank you Kevin, You always know what I am writing about so well. Hugs and smiles to you. Take care.
Always A Friend,
Sandy
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amazing
the picture you have created here is fabulous very sad and touching,but creatively so your words are so gentle and delicate,if i could i would bring you tissues and a tub of icecream for the pain. the rhyming in this is very clever and it has a rhythm that rolled right off my tongue thankyou for sharing littlefishone
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Wonderful Comment
What a delightful comment. Sure brought a smile. Thank you for stopping by a reading. You take care.
Sandy
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wow that's really sad.
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Great Comment
Thank you for the nice coment. Take care, Sandy
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Outstanding
This poem is full of sadness but it is deeply touching too. I loved the whole concept of hiding your heart in a box so that it can never be hurt again. I wish life was more like this so that we would never feel the pain anymore. Best of luck in the contest.
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A Lovely Comment
Thank you for this most lovely comment. It is appreciated. Take care. Sandy
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Superb
Aye, 'tis a very fine write, indeed. Imagery, rhythm and rhyme are just fine. Thanks for sharing this one with us. -
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Thank you Clovis
I always appreciate when you stop by. Thank you for the nice comment. Take care. Sandy
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