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Do It Again...

~*~
As a
soap sliver, in
a warm bath, I inhale
the scent of you, and instantly...
I melt

~*~

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Cinquain Form 24682 syllabication

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  • Swan song gold member
    October 31, 2008
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    My opinion is this is treally an exellent poem
    touhcing to my heart


  • Arkbear gold member
    October 22, 2008
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    Hello

     

    Well, besides being perfect in message, form & presentation......you have accidently broken the rules

     

    No CAPS & no Punc.'s....I am saddened to see this, as this was/is in the top 3 reads thus far.......God bless you and thank you for entering......I shall think about what to do with this entry......good luck!

     

     

     

    Bear ~


    • butterflywriter
      October 22, 2008
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      Ooops...

      LOL, I went back and edited it, the original submission had none. I can remove it or just read more carefully next time, sorry about that, thanks for the kind words. P


  • JustADutchie gold member
    October 20, 2008

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    Beautiful cinquain in perfect shape. Makes me almost wish I had a bath in stead of a shower LOL.

    ~Titia~


  • chatelaine
    October 19, 2008

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    Enjoyable and romantic.
    I like it! Of course I am a push over for that stuff Beautiful


  • paulcreates silver member
    October 18, 2008

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    I like it. It contains that after-silence of a warm bath too. The lingering feel.
    Good job Louisiana.

    Paul

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