We finally made it!
Together forever and ever.
Been through the worst,
now going for the better.
Hand in hand we go,
just you and me.
Our bodies hanging out,
we walk into the sea.
The waves gently caress,
and bring such delight.
In the cover of the moon,
we make love out of sight.
My eyes have been fading,
but your beauty I still see.
Memories take me way back,
when you cried, "Big boy...take me!"
Author notes
Picture courtesy of Photobucket - Artist Unknown
A contest entry
- Big Points Funny Rhymer VII by BuriedTreasures.
6000 points, ended October 27, 2008, 18 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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This poem was so funny yet sweet. It reminds me of my grandparents who have been married for 53 years! And the picture is soooo cute!!!! The first stanza is my favorite and really reminds me of my grandparents. For the better and for the worst. They argued last Thanksgiving over the gravy boat!!! It was rather amusing and how angry he got and left the house and how she looked at me and said 'see? see how childish he can still be?' And they're in there 80's and been married so lllooonnnggg!! Cute write. I enjoyed it. It brought a smile to my lips.
Ashley

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Thanks much for the read and comment!
It is so cute to see a couple together that has been with each other through everything big and small...like fighting over the "gravy boat" Ha!
darlintlc
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Failing Eyesight to be sure---A good take on the prompt and thank you for your entry!


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LMAO


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nice write
This is wonderful, i love the way you portray the beauty that can only shine with the wisdom of age the verse is awesome thanks

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Thanks much! I thought they were such a cute couple!
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Nicely done! Good luck in the contest!


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Thanks Sis!
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I was going to write a poem for this but I think I just read the winner! This was perfect for the pic! I loved it!


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Thanks again my friend for reading and your kind comments!
You really should enter cause you are great at this stuff!!
Glad u enjoyed it but I hardly ever win.
Thanks for your kindness
darlintlc
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