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Ride

I feed the little spaceship money
And it goes back and forth

When I close my eyes
I feel like I'm flying
Flying
Going so so far beyond all existence

But I'm not.
My quarter runs out
And I open my eyes on earth
Like everyone else;
I open my eyes.

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  • amaranthine lover gold member
    August 28
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    21.71 / 25

    This is a cute memory, something that we can all relate to.


  • Griswold
    August 21

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    Hey you picked my favorite kiddy ride!!! most people say I'm a space cadet, I wonder what they mean by that? Thank you so much for entering the "Fight for the Gold" contest, it is greatly appreciated. Best of luck to you in the judging... Scott


  • Shujaat A Rahi
    April 2

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    Very imaginative and fanciful indeed! Our fancies and dreams make our life worthwhile. Go on dreaming...some of them will be realised sooner or later.


  • Nuclear
    October 18, 2008

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    Were you riding one of those little kid rides at a grocery store?

    I like that you go back to thinking like a child with your vast imagination.