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Mr. Skellington [The Pumpkin King]

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JUMP! -- Comes the monster from under your bed
  
As ghosts in the closet play tricks with your head
  
Creepy voices leaking through the gap beneath you door
  
Kids rampage the streets, dressed by the local costume store

   Shrieks of horror reverberating down the alleys of the town
   Kind neighbours reward with candy, answering the door bell all night round
   Everybody’s hair stands on edge as pumpkins watch them with evil eyes
   Liquorice, candy, chocolates and smiles - every trick-or-treater’s desired prize
   Look over there! The Grim Reaper with his scythe is approaching our yard
   Inside the black shadow are a young boy’s eyes reflecting the night sky’s stars
   No other time of the year could you get away with pretending to kill
   Green faces and distorted bodies - the ugliness is part of the thrill
   The fun is drawing to a close, parents are reclaiming their little creatures
   Only the piles of candy are reminders… along with the kids’ choc-covered features
   Night, night until next year, Jack.

 

Author notes

The huge amount of Halloween contests on this site was bugging me, so I figured I'd write one And, LOL, it was fun! If I may be so bold, I would say I did fairly well for an Aussie who has only experienced Halloween once. =)
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  • Amunet Wolfbane Moderators member
    November 23, 2008

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    I think you've done very well. No Halloween there? It's really a great holiday here. I really liked and enjoyed this poem. It' s creative, well written and an acrostic. Nice


  • Little Eagle Greeters member
    November 21, 2008

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    Nice acrostic, I like the way you highlighted each first letter in read.


    Thank you for entering. Good luck in the contest and thank you for following the rules.

    I encourage you to keep writing to read and comment



    Happy Halloween and God Bless
    Tammy

    • KyleBerg gold member
      November 22, 2008
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      Thanks for the kind comment.
      Was glad to be a part of the contest


  • CowboyFan1
    October 21, 2008
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    nice poem. i like how u spelt out " jack skeleton"


  • Hannie
    October 19, 2008

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    i love it!! like to dani i love nightmare before christmas (altho i dont have anything that acctually is nbc) but yer awesome poem

  • panic-tiger-is-here
    October 18, 2008

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    I like it, it makes me wish my parents would celebrate halloween. Really good


    • KyleBerg gold member
      October 19, 2008
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      LOL
      I only got to celebrate it once, while I was living in Canada in 2004,
      It was pretty awesome =)
      It pretty much doesn't exist in my little corner of australia, though I've heard that some areas in the cities do trick-or-treating =)
      Thank you for the comment

      • panic-tiger-is-here
        October 20, 2008
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        Oh thats not fair i want to celebrate it!!!! Thats soo cool that you lived in canada. Is it cold over there? I really want to go trick-or-treating now

  • Loves HER Master
    October 18, 2008
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    Totally amazing!!!
    I love it, great job!


  • November-Dani
    October 18, 2008

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    I am obsessed with the nightmare before christmas. Everything I own is nightmare before christmas. This is so awesome, I love it heaps. Well done.
    Dani.


    • KyleBerg gold member
      October 19, 2008
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      Obsessions are awesome!
      My latest one is Stewie Griffin
      I'm actually going to be watching this movie tomorrow night for the first time, I only know about it from playing Kingdom Hearts =)
      Thank you for the kind comment, as always


  • Captain Jenny
    October 18, 2008

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    This is awesome. I love Jack Skellington Great write and good luck

    ~lae

    • KyleBerg gold member
      October 19, 2008
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      Hehe yeah,, Jack is the coolest =)

      Thank you

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