My sympathies rest with ye, Alcoholic,
For my eyes yet fail miserably at withdrawal
Although I know not what impedes.
Perhaps it is the dark curls lapping at the nape
Of his neck that in anyone else
I would have looked upon with distaste?
Or more the inexplicable posture, the ease of movement?
But when that upturning of the mouth
Forever directed elsewhere lights up
His supposedly-common features,
Certainty dissolves doubt, I am an Addict.
Yet only stony pupils meet mine,
Brimming with scorn perhaps reserved for
Those who have not the will to abstain..
Vintage Port marked 'POISON'.
Author notes
This Love- The Veronicas ( based on the lines
"Even if I leave you now
And it breaks my heart
Even if I'm not around
I won't give in
I can't give up
On this love" for the purposes of this contest).
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AP name: Overcast
Option #3(in the contest by 'grumpybat' ).
A contest entry
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What d'you think?
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Thanks for entering. Loved the first stanza.
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You're welcome. And thank you (that's two of the three Magic Words, I see!
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Lovely imagery, and excellent piece!!!!! This is very well expressed, I like it a lot. Thank you for entering, the only thing I would really change is the use of the word "ye" in the poem's beginning. It didn't make much sense to me, but that's just my opinion. Again, excellent write!
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Thanks for taking the time to read and comment!
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than youfor putting everything inyour an. i loved this poem and it was great
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Why, thank you!
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This was very well written. With a lot of feeling. wekll done and good luck in the contests
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Okay, this is late! Much thanks
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Thank you for your deeply expressed entry, Josie
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And thank you for the comment.
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Thanks for entering!
Heroin is a word I can use to describe this poem. Pure cocaine of poetry. I was addicted from the first line. Thanks for entering and good luck.
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Much thanks!
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( Option 5 - DirtyLittlePrincess)
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Wow is all I can say..
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It's all I could ask for!
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You are welcome love
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Thank you!
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Addiction comes in many shapes, whether we are the addict or one we love is. It is a circle unbroken until there is resolve.
There are some really great lines in this piece that bring your wonderful points home.
for my eyes yet fail miserably at withdrawal.
It is hard to see the hard part of withdrawal. This poem wraps real life into a hard hitting piece. Much much potential here. I look forward to reading more.
~Pamela
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I'm not sure what you're saying here, that you're love at first sight is alcohol or that you love the person like alcohol? But I do like the poem and think it has great merit and for the purposes of this contest, I would like to read that you have fallen in love at first sight with an addict. thank you for entering my contest.
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