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Grand father,grand father clock

gand father,grand father the clock
you attract my intrest
For i am small
you have an elegance, on i don't understand
Your keyhole
so large, and oddly shaped
Dose my finger fit
Yes!!
I know I can confide in you are my friend
No, i don't want to leave grand father!
Grand father clock I must leave to rest my head on a pillow





Author notes

An ending I wasen't shure how to in coreprt: Boy, that was a strange dream....
Grand father, grand father clock are you still there?

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  • Polaja Greeters member
    October 19, 2008

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    This is an interesting poem - I like the interpretation of this as a dream - I think that some spell-checking might be in order here - but apart from that this was a nice read ... thank you for your entry

    Keep writing

    Polly


  • Room without doors gold member
    October 18, 2008

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    Outstanding

    This has great simplicity and charm. I liked how you used personification to give the clock character and related to your own feelings about it. This is well-written and thoughtful. Best of luck in the contest.