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Autumn

Motley colours of the forest top
Ablaze in daylight’s waning glow
As disgruntled leaves begin to drop
Onto cold bare ground way below

Busy squirrels along frost-covered path
Scurry for food as winter looms
Golden leaves in gentle winds waft
Over sad plants with forgotten blooms

Frost-covered branches beseech the sky
For sunshine, just a little longer
Perhaps this is the reason why
At times rises an Indian summer



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  • Aesthete2000 gold member
    October 19, 2008
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    Ah, Lee, you have captured the season.

    Our Indian Summer comes and goes. But the
    82 degrees of last week, banished as unusual.

    Strange contrast, near bare branches on some trees, a full head of leafy hair just next door!!

    Well done, Lee, well done!!!

    Aesthete


    • Lee Tai Wah
      October 19, 2008
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      Hi Aesthete

      Thank you. Do you mean that there can be more than one Indian summer per autumn?


      • Summer52
        October 22, 2008

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        Congrats, Pengyou, Lee !!!

        Yam seng ! Kudos to your another HM.

        na-na-na-na-na ...Hurray to Pengyou, Lee !!!


        summer51


        • Lee Tai Wah
          October 22, 2008
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          Hi summer

          Thank you. I am still looking for the blue one.


      • Aesthete2000 gold member
        October 19, 2008

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        Perhaps it depends upon where one lives.
        Sort of sporadic here, changeable day by day.

        Still pretty nice for mid-October.


        • Lee Tai Wah
          October 19, 2008

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          Hi Aesthete

          Wow! Beautiful picture. The sunlight, the plants and the flowers are still blooming! Is it now late autumn? What about my plants with forgotten blooms?


          • Aesthete2000 gold member
            October 19, 2008
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            Yesterday, Jake (the puppy) and family came over to help
            clear the patio, bring inside, under lights, all the hearty ones
            that will keep giving all winter---rosemary, mint, etc.
            The shame, lots of new flowering buds on the cherry tomatoes,
            but just too much stuff to deal with. Had to retire them.

            The hardy ones live on outside, with a cover over them on low, low temp nights,
            below freezing. Hoping they will make it to Thanksgiving!


  • Summer52
    October 19, 2008
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    Indian summer in autumn? What does it looks like, pengyou Lee?

    But this one is really good.

    Good luck to another deserving trophy for you.


    summer51


    • Lee Tai Wah
      October 19, 2008
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      Hi summer

      Indian summer is a time of calm high temperature which sometimes occur in late autumn (and when the Indians come out to play ) How come you don't know? Is there no autumn in the Phillipines? Then you should come to Malaysia.


      • Summer52
        October 19, 2008
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        You have snow there also, pengyou Lee? I like to see snow... Okay I will visit your place next year...When is the Indian summer time in your place?

        We have only 2 seasons...wet and dry... but some addition of typhoons, earthquakes too... can you consider that special seasons, pengyou?


        summer51


        • Lee Tai Wah
          October 19, 2008
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          Hi summer

          Yes, we have the 4 seasons at a park in Shan Alam. Inside the building, it is spring, summer, autumn and winter all at the same time but in different sections. Indian summer is anytime you step out from the autumn room


  • misticmoonlite gold member
    October 18, 2008

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    oh yes

    this would be an Indian summer around here, nice and well written poem , thank you for this entry, good luck
    Linda

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