As fragile as my heart was
you still decided to abuse it
and now I am drowning
in teaspoon deep water
offering you what is left of it
I fell in love so quickly
I offered you my hand
but this time it is differen't
as you are breaking my ambition
and letting my hopes sink into the sand
I am floating away with the current
where you left me here alone
there is no such thing as drowning lessons
when all you need is your loss of hope
You were my life preservor
you saved me many times
and after all that I put in it
I am drowning for the second
and last time
I have lost the little hope you gave me
and the smile I wore when I was with you
I am now gasping on air bubbles
and I can not swim
when I am without you
I am choking on the words you said
the day you decided to leave
as my hand is slowly pleading for you
and I am drowning
drowing in the teaspoon deep water below me.
A contest entry
- Picture Inspired by ennovy.
700 points, ended October 31, 2008, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
please give me your honest opinion on what you truly think of this piece I will return the favor...*muah* (redhanded)
Comments
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What a sad write. So full of pain and agony. I do love all the metaphors that are all about.
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Why is it someone gives us an innertube to stay afloat, and then pricks it and lets us drown?
A very strong and emotional write, I liked the use of the hand and the metaphor of the reaching hand in the final stanza.
Good luck in the contest, and thanks for entering.
Novy & Brazos -
Nice take, on giving up for the last time after trying so hard to make it work..........Thank you for entering our contest...Novy & Brazos
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