Paranoia returns in various agglomerations
Christ! You panic, repelling intimate virtuous acceptance.
caress your personal rights.
i value a cynical yet posthumous reputation in virtue
as continuous yielding passes right inside.
Virgins await clean youths
panties right in valiant acceptance
corroding yet
peeling, right inside, viruses away.
cares?
yesterday...
A contest entry
- are you up for it? by willowprincess.
1200 points, ended November 9, 2008, 7 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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"i value a cynical yet posthumous reputation in virtue"
I love it! I just wish I could mark this particular poem to make a re-read easier. I navigate this site like a hippo in a dollhouse!
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Great stuff!!!
Strong narrative with some excellant word choices & use that made for a compelling read that enthralled throughout...
Contratulations on a well deserved shiney...
Keep up the good work...
Well done!!!
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you did an excellent job with the form. you have some great enjambed lines and descriptions of privacy. good job.
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Thank you very much
for the trophy. I have to admit it's a difficult form - but it's a new experience and I am more than happy with the poem and the reactions so far. Again, thank you so much.
Götz
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I get it... Each successive word starts with a letter that is an acrostic of sorts for privacy... repeated seven times. Cool concept. Why am I particularly drawn to the iteration that starts with the word "panties"?
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Well Jim...
I liked the idea behind this concept and since I usually seem to suffer some kind of Pink Floyd-induced insomnia when checking my AP account, I just picked out some word I thought of I could write something about. It turned out to be more sleep-robbing than I initially intended, so I tried to describe several layers of what the word privacy could mean. Oh, and the panties... privacy coming from "being deprived of something", I thought there is something we all are deprived of one day. (Plus, I couldn't think straight anymore to be honest
BTW I had a look at your photo page the other day and liked them very much.
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This is deep! A bit complicated so I'd have prefered an explaination in the usernotes since my english can't help me understand it very well. lol
I think I got part of the idea and this part I liked alot, very trong! Best of luck in the contest.
~Noor
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