frost on grass
a fleeting form
that is and is not
-Zaishiki
the elements tease nature
as if words teasing a poet
-my reply
Author notes
the promt is: "Read the prompt poem and write one in repsonse."
...I hope two lines count as a poem.
In a list
A contest entry
- Z is for Zaishiki by just mercedes.
1000 points, ended October 28, 2008, 12 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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its so nice
its very nice, I liked it very much :-)
Regards,
Mou
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Good write. congratulations on silver
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Like a dog with a bone I romp with my poems
then chew them down to the nub.
It is cool when two lines tease forward and make more sense than one hundred and twenty!
Congrats on the silver!
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Thank you madam for your eliquant praise!
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Thank you for this entry in the contest. Yes, your response to the prompt is a poem to me, it is beautiful, and makes me see the almost-but-not-quite stage of poetry, where ideas are teasing, choosing their words, changing as frost changes to water, the form in which it can provide sustenance. Lovely.
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Awesome
I rewlly like your tresponse and I find a 2 line response to be quite approp[riate and well written too. I am not the judge but if I were I'd let this slide as it makes alot of sense and well seems cool. anyw ays good work
good luck in the contest
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Neat...the usage of tease adds both a playfulness and a sense of continuum...feels as if the seasons are personified /impish...
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Thank you, Yvette.
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elements tease nature
poet teases a reply
from frosted grass blade
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Now we're all being teased!
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Very Zen! Really well thought out poem. Enjoyed it tremendously. Best of luck in the contest.
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Thanks muchly !!!
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ahhhh teasing huh?
and so i read this and became aroused by those elements of nature... should i fight the shame- i ask myself?.. and then i arrive at the conclusion that i am the sole proprietor of these memories you took me to, and if i do not exercise them... they might cease to exist and leave on the wind.
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Thankee M'am!
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