Between two worlds rolling regimes
Writhing cry to dwell in ones dreams
Tuned to reach enchanted daydreams
Serpentine spines arched to be gleams
Ecstatic the dance abounding
To know your body as sunbeams
Dance in your body abiding
Serpentine spines arched to be gleams
Bliss to breathe as one intertwine
with your body encircling
Dark turns slowly into divine
Serpentine spines arched to be gleams
Between two worlds rolling regimes
Serpentine spines arched to be gleams
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Comments
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This is great! So few Kyrielle Sonnets rhyme this well and by using monorhyme in S1 you composed a rhyming couplet. Brilliant! The poem its self is pure emotional imagery. Well done!
Love,
Amera♥
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I don't think I've ever read anything by you before, but this was equisitively written, truly. Not only that, but I'm not entirely sure I've come across this type of Sonnet before either - yet it was a joy to read, and to see how you made the words entwine with each other. I'll have to study it in a little while and see if I can make out the form of this type of sonnet - the "Kyrielle" as you said.
Onto the poem itself, this was beautifully written with some very 'realistic' wording in there to set the scene - especially the verse that said,
"Bliss to breathe as one intertwine
with your body encircling
Dark turns slowly into divine "
That, to me, was very expressive - as though time was ticking past gradually, and you got a sense of held breathe with anticipation, and perhaps ,even rising lust for some reason.
Thanks for entering this, and opening my eyes to the Kyrielle, I'll have to go and do soem research on it now
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I loved this as usual your such a great writer! Good luck in the contest
Ecstatic the dance abounding
To know your body as sunbeams
Dance in your body abiding
Serpentine spines arched to be gleams
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