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Deceiving Darkness

Darkness covers me tightly
I make my way to the light
Only to be deceived

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  • BleedingDeep
    November 23, 2008

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    Interesting!

    I like this piece! Thanks for the comment byt the way! You did a great job at this… not much words here, but yet there is so much said.


  • Lady Michaella
    October 19, 2008

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    thoughtful

    Dark and daring. I liked this a lot, this poem shows a lot of truth about life and being deceived. Thanks for entering!
    -RoseDaughter-


  • storiesuntold gold member
    October 18, 2008

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    Oh this is sad

    Often the mind refuses to live in harmony with the body its like two voices one for good one for bad only it is your choice which you choose so if you are tired of being in the dark take a good look ant what you do you are the only one to change this to set yourelf free and walk out into the light and truly breath