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falling
tears of sadness
for the unfed children
who die from starvation daily
nameless
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In a list
A contest entry
- Poetry Formed XXXVIII - by Bear - by Arkbear.
825 points, ended October 22, 2008, 18 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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tears
This is so good! So much better than mine I'm going to have to practice a lot. Thanks for sharing with us. UNT
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Thank you Kappa...I thought yours was excellent. I think it was thre picture that did it...don't be discouraged.
Shelly
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......and for once, I do not agree with Timmy (sheltered)....I believe two breaths is all you need to read this ~
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Wow.....this is powerful penning.......and your Forms' aesthetics are superb.....Presentation is heartbreaking.....lasting impression is key to winning.......I have 19 other entries to go,......good luck & God bless you!
Bear ~
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Thank you kind sir...for your comments, compliments and for the trophy...both mean so much to me. I'll be looking foir the next contest...love the form and the challenge it brings.
Shelly
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this has three breaths
and the top line could be longer
good theme -
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You are right again...so I changed it. I took all of your suggestions ( I heard you thinking them)...well? Anything else?
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nevr mind 3 syllables.. lol
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crocodile?
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what does crocodile mean??? enlighten me!!!
Shelly -
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sorry...
crocodiles don't have the ability to cry
so crocodile tears have been used as a way to say
fake tears basically
which is what most cry
even as they hand their wallets
to some money grubbing
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Huummmm????? your commet has confused me...does it insinuate that the the tears I describe in my poem are not sincere??? I would write about them but have no emotion towards them?
You are an interesting man!
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not at all
but that a lot of people give money just to make themselves feel good not because they really care
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Bob below asks a good question, but the answer is simple, We need to face this sadness head on before it eats up humanity and is too late. The fact of the matter is closed eyes just won't cut it anymore. A poignant write dear poet.
C
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I agree...but it won't happen. Eyes are not closed to the situation...they're wide open and still nothing. Starvation and homelessness is an epidemic in this country...what does our country do for us??? Nothing
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We need to do what we feel is right for ourselves, one voice begins in a whisper and becomes a roar over time when more people become aware and take a chance to be the changes that count. I found my calling with Africa, I am one person but it still causes a change. Don't wait for someone else to do it.
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That said
In this world of ME. Do we dare to face such real sadness? I am lost.
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Do we dare???? the sadness is here. I think the question should be...how dare we not!!!! Action is the only answer, no matter how you spell it, flip it, word it, write it, read it. Hunger and homelessness is an epidemic in this country and this country has failed us in allowing this to happen. Bail out High power banks for billions while americans sleep under bridges eating out of garbage cans...the left overs that someone won't eat. It's disqusting.
Sorry for the soap box...the politics that is going on now drives me insane.
Thanks my friend for the read and your comments. Your opinion matters
Shelly
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