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Demented

Missing image
Safety pinned eyes
scream for sewn lips
choking on fear
and thick vomit!

In a list

A contest entry

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  • Miss Macabre
    August 18

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    Short, and very odd. Safety pinned eyes to me sounds particularly morbid, I'm trying NOT to see that in my mind, lol. Thanks for entering and good luck.


  • Amunet Wolfbane Moderators member
    December 6, 2008

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    Wow, now this makes a strong impact for few words. I can easily see this for its metaphoric qualities.


  • Lady Michaella
    October 17, 2008
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    um.. vomit= grose? lol, i loved this. Its so tense at the begining, and the imagery is also chat, but amazing at the same time. The last line was very powerful, but made me laugh because its funy.. lol. I really liked this, it was so dark.. but for some reason made me laugh, weird?
    But it is amazing anyways. Thanks for entering!
    -RoseDaughter-