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Fragrance Smoke

inhale
fragrance smoke in
deeply within crevice

lining velvet sheets freshly washed
clothes line

A contest entry

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  • Arkbear gold member
    October 22, 2008

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    Hello

     

    Aesthetics are off a bit in 3rd L.....your Flow is a bit choppy......but you did good.....not sure it will win Gold, but let's see what happens

     

     

    God bless you!

     

     

    Bear ~

    • kendhal22
      October 22, 2008
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      thank you

      Thank you for the wonderful comment given. Kendhal22