Beware my darlin' dear
you just may be in danger!
Those voices in my head
their talk is getting stranger.
Years lived with-in the torture
hiding shades of black and blue.
My heart breaking not alone
my mind snapped right into.
I fight to keep them silent
they tell me that you lie.
You really do not love me
it's time for you to die!
Author notes
Option#5 - "Voices in my head"
A contest entry
- Take my poem titles and use them in your poems! #2 by Paloszoo.
700 points, ended October 29, 2008, 10 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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I've got the theme from the Twilight Zone going through MY head, thanks to the piece! It's fun to do pieces like that.
Congrats on the HM.
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Made me smile.
Is he still alive?
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LOL!! glad u got a smile from this...yes he's still alive but it's only a matter of time! Hee hee!!
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This is perfect for the prompt. Congrats on the HM.
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Thanks much! This was one my husband didn't like too much! ha ha!!
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Excellent. I can relate to this! Nicely penned! Thanks for entering my contest. I'm honored to have you share your work here. Good luck!
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I fight to keep them silent
they tell me that you lie.
You really do not love me
it's time for you to die!
Wow! Hmm...does everyone think this way? Maybe not, but...maybe- at times. -
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Thanks for the comment! Sometimes that little part of you inside might have these thoughts ...but we don't act on them, atleast most of us don't!
I believe if you get it all out by writing it down it can show you that it might be time to get out of the sistuation before you do something you wouldn't want to!
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This is very well penned
You made my blood freeze. It is without distance, without compromise that the reader, well me, is literally sucked into the poem. I'm glad if you've come over or arranged yourself with these difficulties. Spooky!
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Thanks for your comment. This was a bad time in my life but...I got out! I was never the kind of person to hurt someone else(I always was the one to get hurt) but sometimes you just want to get mad and punish the one who is hurting you...writing has always been my outlet!
Didn't mean to scary you...it was just a "what if" poem what if I let that dark side take over?
darlintlc
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Such a sad poem! So much pain with no way out it seems. Only pain and violence seem to be the answer. Abuse no matter what the form always ends badly. Such an emotional poem!
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Thanks for reading and the comment! This is one of my more dark and sad poems...it's been awhile. I believe we all have it in us to have these kind of voices if pushed far enough. This was part of my past life...I moved on(I think) and chose to leave before those bad voices took over!
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