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Crackling Pond

Paired eyes
ponder behind
a crackling pond sipping
under foot give away to the
moist earth

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  • Arkbear gold member
    October 22, 2008
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    Hello

     

    Did you mean *slipping*....or *sipping*?

     

    *under foot*....should be.....*underfoot*...>>

    http://dictionary.reference.com/browse/underfoot

     

    Aesthetics are a tad off in 2nd L......thank you so much for trying.....your efforts are well-noted

     

    God bless you!

     

     

    Bear ~

    • saddie23
      October 22, 2008
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      thank you

      Thank you for the comment given. I did mean sipping and underfoot was a typo. Saddie23