Lonely fingers strum
a one sided duet...
Candle light dances,
enhancing the rhythm.
Enfolding deeper...
...deeper within myself,
longing for our harmony.
My body still trembles beneath
a mere figment of memory.
Ebbing the ache,
release comes bittersweet...
Helping me sift to a place,
where my heart
was never misplaced.
Author notes
This was a prompt in my own contest. I found I had to write for it myself. 
http://allpoetry.com/contest/2424343
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a great poem to accompany a great photographic piece of art, rhythm and harmony playing on the skin's ripples.
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sounds like sad times. good expressions
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The picture is amazing and the words flow with such passion and grace, I loved the entire thing...wow!
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Such an exquisie ache...such lovely brush strokes...beautiful writing!
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Very beautiful poem.
Lines 8 and 9 are my favorite.
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just poking in for the group reading list
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painfully beautiful...
lloved this line
My body still trembles beneath
a mere figment of memory.
stunning write hun thank you for sharing this within the group as well
Tasha
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A wonderful write of desire and longing. Great meter, and overall a good form. Nicely written
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wow, so beautiful, i loved this piece, the flow of it was brillaint and the picture only added to the deep emotion of such a talented written piece, well done
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Tear-Striken...
My heart laments in a place much like you described here. Your pain, your aching are as my own. You have a masterful way with words...
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beautiful
it's taken me awhile to be able to find the words to the poem that took my breath away. you have such wonderful imagery that i just wanted to be sure that i was able to give you a worthy comment. there's such longing and beauty within this short breath of life that's here. such a wonderful job, i hope that you are proud of it! if i think of anything to add to my comment i'll try to send you another one, but all i have to say is sorry for taking so long to comment on this piece of art. the picture practically blended with your poem, altogether making it one beautiful piece of artwork. again great job!!!
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Oh my this is about the best comment I have had...
You are very kind. I am glad you enjoyed this.
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you're welcome! anytime for one of my favorites!!!
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This is no less than tremedous I think one of your best poems.
Enfolding deeper...
...deeper within myself,
longing for our harmony.
This lines really got to me
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The beginning line sets the tone for this haunting poem. I love the use of musical metaphors for love. The picture is the perfect complement to the loneliness of this word portrait. I love it when a judge feels inspired by her own theme. Peace, Liz
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The pic is amazing.
And your poem is a wonderful interpretation of it, using fabulous metaphors and imagery.
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I like the musical metaphors; the sadness of loss always strikes a chord for me. This poem moves beautifully, thanks for bringing it to the group.
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aww sometimes writing for a prompt you like is the best thing to do. Sad tones to this poem love ya cuz blessings always~ Trisha~
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pensive and sad but still there is distance between regret and this place your words have captured.
great job!
ken
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You did this picture justice with your words...soft beautiful flow with beautiful imagery and depth...love the ending...lovely work, my dear...
mystic
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Oh, this is beautiful! I love the wonderful soft flow and the stunning imagery here. The photo is beautiful, and the only critique I would make would be to change the "one sided" to "one-sided." Fantastic write.
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Wow!
Such imagery pours froms the inner beauty within. I'm impressed with your wording; you kept me close with your pain and the ending was marvelous. Saddie23 -
poet
The ache the stings within will oneday become a passing memroy and That dance becomes one that lifts yo towards a just light and love begans again.
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This is a beautiful poem! I really like the picture that inspired it and I think that you have crafted a story from that picture wonderfully your words are soft and confiding - I enjoyed this piece a lot!
Keep writing
Polly
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This has some of the most lovely lines and insightful lines I have read in some time. A sad and longing poem, beautiful in it's lonliness.
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AWWW beautiful. What an awesome picture this is and what a great contest it was. I am so glad you shared this poem of yours. Thanks
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A 'one sided duet...'
how clever of you to think of that. It has intrigued me because it is so true. Loneliness is one sided...and the plea for the duet is there...I am going to think about this for ages. And that is only the first two lines!
What a wonderful poem.
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"helping me sift to a place,
where my heart
was never misplaced."
Music does that for me...loved the write
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Nothing short of spectacular.
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beautiful and perfection in your prompt...your use of metaphors is only surpassed by your light to blend the perfect words...an excellent piece
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