Oh my love
look I am a normal man
so be normal to me
while I want to hold back my love making
albeit it is you
making me a man of unlimited thirsts
I prefer to break for a short while
adapting to perceive something else
determined to think something different from you
needing to be accustomed to missing you
since by now
your embrace, your charm, and your attachment
are the significant activities
as the only well-being for me
yet I do fear, if someday, you are lost,
I would forget to live
Oh my love...
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FREE VERSE...
A contest entry
- ...♥...How to say "I love you"...♥... by Rebekah-Ann.
800 points, ended November 11, 2008, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - loosing a loved one by karas.
400 points, ended November 25, 2008, 47 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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This is brilliant! Totally sweet, but a little bit of eroticism thrown in there. I wish I could find someone in my own life that would pen wonderful pieces like this for me. Whoever your love is, I hope they realize what a gift they have found in you.
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I can't describe what words can't justify!!!
Loved it!
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Well, that poem threw me off guard. I like it. It's simple love, at a simple place, in a simple time. It's easy and short. With a message that's hidden between the lines. I know that's not what you did. But, I like looking outside the box sometimes. It helps the mind explore different things. I like it. Nice poem. Keep writing.
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A sweetly accomodating write for the beloved...You say 'I love you' beautifully, my friend...Best of luck in this contest. Peace always, Rhonda
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Your Anglo has come a long way baby
look I am a normal man
so be normal to me
while I want to hold back my love making
albeit it is you
making me a man of unlimited thirsts
I prefer to break for a short while
adapting to perceive something else
determined to think something different from you
needing to be accustomed to missing you
since by now
your embrace, your charm, and your attachment
are the significant activities
as the only well-being for me
yet I do fear, if someday, you are lost,
I would forget to live
Oh my love...
YET I DO FEAR, IF SOMEDAY, YOU ARE LOST,
I WOULD FORGET TO LIVE
priceless!!!!!!
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What a poetic way to say "I love you."
"your embrace, your charm and your attachment
are the significant activities
as the only well-being for me"
You have said that you can't live without her, but you have done it in such a way that it sounds sincere, not pitiful. Nicely done. -
True love looks beyound skin and desires, beyond ordinary and special. If it is true love then it is forever... beautiful write, the ending was one painted will and showed so much love. Nohing short of what I've come to expect from you, great poet! Best of luck in the contest!
~Noor
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