at honour’s call –
as white blossoms make
a perfect pall
Author notes
4-5-4 jisei, the rhyme is coincidental.
A contest entry
- ~To take a life ~ CLOSING IN 5 MINUTES!!! by Rebekah-Ann.
300 points, ended October 17, 2008, 6 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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pure simple imagery. Your comment about the samurai context adds to the impact.
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Very neat and effective
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Funny how some flowers have such deep meanings. Well done!
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Thank you.
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a very beautifully painted haiku here and I love the type you penned here =) keep up the good work
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Thank you. This is specifically a "jisei" - a poem which might be penned at the approach of death. In this instance, I am envisaging the suicide of a samurai, for the contest about taking life.
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Perfect!!!
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Thank you.
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You're welcome,
It was my pleasure! 
Take care, Peace.
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Coincidental or not, It is very noticeable and I think it adds a feel to the image.
Love,
Amera♥
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The rhyme and the common initial letters both add something ethereal to this
great stuff
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