Infant dearest, beloved one,
Clandestinely I conceived.
Now I wonder what I have done!
Silently yearning for a son.
Perfectly normal I believe.
Infant dearest, beloved one,
The thought of telling makes me run.
For your father I did deceive.
Now I wonder what I have done!
This journey of our love begun,
while safe inside me you are weaved.
Infant dearest, beloved one,
Money to raise you, I have none.
And surely daddy will now leave.
Now I wonder what I have done!
Baby I pray, your heart I’ve won
Foolish to want you, so naïve…
Infant dearest, beloved one,
Now I wonder what I have done!
Author notes
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Option 4:
Write about awaiting the arrival of an unborn child
In a list
A contest entry
- Finding Love [True Love Waits Forever][Awaiting Arrival Of Unborn Child] by stargazer..
400 points, ended April 20, 62 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Those are the risks one takes. The greater the reward, the bigger the risk. It's both an admission of guilt and still a testament to a mother's desire for a child. Lets hope she's thinking clearly about what lies ahead as a single parent. Congrats on the gold.
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Extraordinary!
This is an extraordinary piece you have written here. It has amazing imagery, and wonderful rhyme.
Having a child is a big responsibility, and when it wasn't planned, and you're not prepared, it can be frightening, especially if you might have to go through it alone. You brought forth all the emotional fears, that come from an un-expected pregnancy, but also love and protection of the child within your womb.
Love & light
Debbera
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Wow!!
Oh My this is a Beauty of a verse which swells the eyes
Powerful images weaved in fine form You pen so well Precious~ today I have dropped diamonds from my eyes twice back to back~ Gorgeous piece like the last one for Your Gem
Excellent!
Congratulations on Your Trophy win!
-Throws confetti-
Woooooooooo Hoooooooooooo
Thank You for sharing Your Heart and Voice~
Many blessings to You in all You do Sweet Soul
Best wishes too
with much love & light~ Desire~*~
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I really love the way that you put this together here. Beautiful imagery and rhyme throughout it. Being a parent is such a new and difficult process in the beginning. It's just a metter of time before everything starts to fall into place.
I am so glad that you won the Gold for this piece and congratulate you on your efforts! Well done and thanks a lot for sharing this write here. Keep up the wonderful work!
Jeremy0826
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A deliciously conceived and written villanelle, the trick with these forms that decree where each line must go is to make the lines make sense with each use. Very few AP poets achieve this!
Here your repeat lines flow naturally the repetition seems appropriate and the overall result is poignant and beautiful, great stuff!
Jeff
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Great writting
I love how you worded this. I see you have a whole lot on your mind. I have a son too (now 5) and I remember how wonderful it felt to know he was there in me. I had so many fears as well. Everything turned out okay for us and I will pray they do for the child and you as well. Don't give up anything is possible and the depth you have shown in this poem proves you are a wonderful mommy already. Good luck. You two will be okay, and God Bless. Keep up the great writing as well.
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I like the solid message behind this poem Rebekah-Ann. It sends out a very poignant lesson to the young, naive and impulsive.
Paul
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Very beautiful poem, engendered strong feelings.
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This is another excellent write.
I think it's absolutely beautiful. However, the exclamation marks, i dunno, aren't my style. I find them hard to use correctly.
"The thought of telling makes me run."
This line was my least favourite. I find the rhythm funny and it comes off as it was some substitute.
Still Your whole poem fits. Its art.
Congrats.
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I was thinking of Amera, while reading this. Her working with the wee ones. This is so good. It
really captures the thoughts of some of today's women.
Joe
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Sadly I feel that this poem was misinterpreted by the reader and now I'm seen as the typical female who makes babies but cannot afford take care of them.
To put the record straight, I am not pregnant! This poem was written out of the sadness of not being able to conceive another child. You see my husband passed away and left me with nothing but debt. I’m in a new relationship but as much as I wanted to have another child now, that is not possible since we have only known each other for Three years and we are not ready to get married and expand the family.
There will be allot of money to be made before I can be a new mommy again, which saddens me allot!
My poetry is an outlet of emotion and not always of that what is happening in my life. It merely reflects my feeling towards a topic.
Thank you for your comment and since you don't really know me or my values you are excused for the misinterpretation.
Take care!
Becks
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no confusion with me
I didn't take this to mean you were the one written of in this poem. Poetry more often than not on this site is written to specific contest prompts and this was no exception. I understand Rebekah-Ann.
Paul
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Beautiful villanelle! Written with love. As long as there is love it will all work out! As long as a child is loved that is the most important thing. Money is not everything. I wish you all the best in the world!
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Thank you for this lovely comment! I cannot afford a baby now, but I so wish that I could... sigh... Thank you in any case
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Sorry for the misunderstanding Rebekah-Ann. I took this out of context taking it a fact. I hope when the time is right you get the baby you are longing for.
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What a wondrous Villanelle ...
woven in words of regret, yet bonding with the life of Eternal love.
You are so special, do you know?
Love
Myra
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Humm..this is really a piece coming from the soul of the poet bringing the connectivity with an unknwon soul around and touching the major issues of life efecting to the motherhood..a heartfelt and amazing piece you brought here with a feel of the univerwsal philosophy ..well done... -
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Thank you kindly for commenting on this poem, you are 100% right, this do come from my soul and I am really happy that you liked it. Thanks for reading!
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You first drew me in with the title of this poem as the topic is so close to my heart. Then to my delight I find the most amazing and beautiful Villanelle. Enough of me chatter, now I need to read it a few more times.
Love,
Amera♥
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Wow thank you kindly for this lovely comment! I am so happy that you liked it
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This is a very well written poem I wish you much luck in the contest best wishes always be well
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thank you for reading and thank you for the kind comment!
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I agree
newly conceived,but yet so innocent, a child will know love or never know what it means, I feel you have a heart of Gold, and will do what you know must be done to make it a happy little child... I wish you the best in all life has to offer,
Linda
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WOW! Thank you for this lovely comment and the lovely wishes! All the best to you too
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wow!
beautiful yet sad..it's scary not knowing the consequences of an act that has such life altering realities. this is very poignant my friend.
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My dear friend!
Thank you for never failing to comment on any one of my poems! I appreciate you so much!!! Thank you for this lovely comment once again!
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