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Southern Arms

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he set sail
on calm waters

to retrieve
his treasure
from southern shores

there she was waiting
with open arms





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fortyninereasons

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  • spiritualangel
    November 6, 2008
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    Well done. Best of luck.


  • Mistressnomaster
    October 18, 2008

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    Shame he has to find you, I always find the reverse works so much better for Me, but to each their own. This is a strong verse which shows a poets touch.

    Mistress Macy


  • who iam
    October 17, 2008

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    Lovely concept


    there she waits with open arms-a true treasure !

    A great story in twenty words ,deserving of gold !

  • copper29
    October 17, 2008

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    Awesome. Great imagery and I loved your two characters. Very nice write- it made me think. Good luck in the contest