here I am...
I hear my heart's rhythm
pulsating the beats through my veins
this taboo, tattooed on my skin
I covet...yet I couldn't hide it
here I am, stumbling...
for the stroke of your fingers
to touch my body...
longing for your lovesong.
Author notes
photo from photobucket.com
In a list
A contest entry
- Picture Inspired 50 words or less by delightfulmess.
450 points, ended October 18, 2008, 14 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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This is brilliant! I love the thought that you
put into this write. Great picture you found
too. Congratulations on your gold trophy
and keep up the wonderful work here!
Thanks a lot for sharing it!
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Jeremy
Thank you so much for dropping by and reading me
Anna Lee
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you deserved the gold for this!
This was brilliant! just wonderful..wow!
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Should any other sing as sweet, to find another with whom one might sing a love-song.
There is a depth to this which takes it out of the ordinary and I loved the song...
Thank you, Poetess, for sharing the write...
Ron.
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Perfect Piece!
You brought it to this contest sweet soul, Bravo!
Thanks for sharing you, and I loved this one alot!
Keep up the wonder of you, love and light
-Timothy aka poeticweaver~ xo
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Aww just really nice and good use of vocab...im starting to wish that I was your lover lol
That type of passion is indeed so rare to find, dont let it go
pleasure to read thank u
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Hi Tammy,
Thank you for your comment
and 
to you
Anna Lee
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this is beautiful Anna Lee
this may be my favorite of your writes, even though I rather enjoy most of your work. I definantly see how you made gold.
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can't thank you enough
you got me smiling all along with your comments...
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A beautiful poem!I love that its so unique!Keep at it!
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The title captured my attention first. I thought it might be an interesting read. It is much more than interesting! The poem along with the picture prompt is outstanding. The photo is nice, but the poetry gives it meaning. "this taboo, tattooed on my skin I covet..." Beautifully personalized for this reader. The sensuality is restrained enough to be the pulse of this piece, underlying the theme of the title. Amazing poetry for me. Geo
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Hi Geo
Thank you so much for the amazing comment, what else can I say, but Thank you. I was staring at your comment and was just point-blank amazed.
Anna Lee
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Excellent
Good work with such depth. Very good, very empathetic. Keep writing you have much to say.
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Thank you so much for your wonderful comment and for checking me here on my other page.
Anna Lee
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absolutely wonderful writing won this gold You were concise, drew a beautiful image, and kept it at a length that did more (not less) for the prompt. You are very very good. Love, Lane
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Ms Lane,
Wow, Thank you for gracing my page...I am one of your fan (silently though)
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Anna...and I am one of yours
I look for women poets who have
that certain something, and after
reading your work I realize that
you have it...and more.
Whenever you want to toss around
ideas or need an ear to listen, just
let me know L
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very nice !
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Thank you It's feels so nice to see you here on my page...truly honored
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soulfully beautiful
Truely entice poem. Seek within to receive from what out to embrace.
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Amazing!
I am just speechless...
my favourite lines:
here I am, stumbling...
for the stroke of your fingers
to touch my body...
longing for your lovesong.
an astonishing poem....i really enjoyed it....
all the best....Grateful
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Thank you Sir Darshan for gracing my page
you made me speechless too
Anna Lee
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Oh girl, this is so very good!
One of the poems I wish to bottle and keep next to me (I have a very small collection of 'I wish to bottle poems).
Simply great!
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Thank you Mari
feel honored to know that you like to keep it...
Anna Lee
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WOW!!! So very moving and sensual.
This is one powerful take. Truely enjoyed
Thank you for your entry in my contest.
Delila
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OMG I won...Thank you so much for the Gold...and for liking it. I couldn't say anything else but Thank you.
Anna Lee
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"here I am, stumbling...
for the stroke of your fingers
to touch my body...
longing for your lovesong."
this is gorgeous...
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Thank you
Anna Lee
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So great to see you writing regularly now, and then to read something as lovely as this. Oh, we all wish for these lovesongs... I'm singing mine. Loved the music of your words!
~ Nicolette
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Thank you so much for the lovely comment. so happy for you, singing lovesongs again...in a certain key
Anna Lee
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The title is interesting, I wonder how literal it is? For to covet often implies not only wanting something, but something that belongs to someone else. But I won't go any further for then I'd go beyond where I belong.
The tattoo of course is that desire to be touched, but in that way one needs to be, not lust, at least not alone, this sheet music requires so much more...and it's the tune any decent guy will relish playing.
Enough of the strained metaphors by me...it's lovely.
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Sir Yem,
Thank you so much for the comment. You always give the best comments and hit the right keys hehe. I always feel honored everytime you drop by my page.
Anna Lee
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This is really good!!!
I covet...yet I couldn't hide it
here I am, stumbling...
for the stroke of your fingers
to touch my body...
longing for your lovesong.
This tells a story of love that's almost forbidden...your usage of the photo and imagery is fantastic!!!
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Thanks sweetness
It feels good to read these words from you, to someone who's really good in this style
Anna Lee
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very nice
very softly sensual, very nice romantic thoughts..lots of luck in the contest my friend!
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Thank you Swan, whew glad you're here...
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Very nicely written my friend,
i feel the longing in this poem,
the longing to have something out of reach
and is that a contest write i see, lol
Good luck in the contest
All the best
Ken
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whew! Ken you know how I fear on entering Contest lol.
Thank you...
Anna Lee
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