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Black Wedding

Pitch black night
crystal clear night time sky
featureless without the light of the moon
the building plastered with black coats of paint
sways to the beat of the dark music
the blushing corpse's bride and her charcoal black groom
the demonic guests with eyes blacker than lumps of coals
stand as one as the bride and groom
walk down the aisle side by side
the room begins to darken
as the strobing black lights take effect
the bride and groom exchanging their vows
walk down the black carpeted ground
with their minions of the night
faithfully following in their steps
together the guests rise as one and follow
as the wedding party empties into the hollow
dark dreary fog enshrouded streets below
never to be seen again
as they are the terrors of the night!

Author notes

Quite Random this poem was.
All I cna really say is I was chilling to the song White Wedding by Billy Idol and well ummm I thought in my twisted muse I would take a stab at creating a black wedding!

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  • Beating gold member
    October 17, 2008

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    This piece is so dark, I was really surprised to know that you wrote this. I know that you've written dark stuff before, but this was different. I liked it, and I liked how epic the tale seemed. Good job!


  • poet2angels gold member
    October 17, 2008

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    Happy Halloween my gifted nephew!
    This is so cool and I love the song White wedding....so awesome....It makes me want to get on the table and dance in a wedding dress lol j/k (maybe) lol
    This is amazing and I love it....
    So, Paul, could this be a preview of a someday wedding?????? lmao You would look cool in black attire

    Aunt Lynda


  • Dmonik
    October 17, 2008

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    Nicely written, and nice twist on White Wedding, probably one of my favourite songs. This is excellent.
    Bravo

    'D'


  • NyteShade
    October 17, 2008

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    I love random poems, you can just write about anything and they turn out good lol. I can sort of see Billy Idol's White wedding in this piece. I like the way it flows and the darkness of this piece. Nicely done


    • SmokinHotWhiteTiger
      October 17, 2008
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      indeed sis indeed. it was random because well when I first wrote the poem OMG it eas a mess and so I edited and edited and edited till I came up with the write you commented on. my whole purpose for the poem was to be complete opposite of the White Wedding song and well make it dark and well I made it from a semi halloweenish style. glad ya enjoyed the write though I try

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