Poetry gave her today;
tender smiles
silken-wrapped inward,
held for future reference.
Toted in her satchel
spilling cerise sugar,
(it leaks from ripped stitching)
visions are painted
onto cement sidewalks.
Depth portrays truth-songs
and follows her around
singing the tune of unity.
Author notes
Image Courtesy of Contest Holder
A contest entry
- Collaborate with me... by poetryality.
600 points, ended October 17, 2008, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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'silken-wrapped inward'
' Toted in her satchel
spilling cerise sugar,
(it leaks from ripped stitching)
visions are painted
onto cement sidewalks.'
I suppose I'll just have to quote the whole thing ? Lovely as I have come to expect!
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This is a beautiful and hopeful work of poetry! It gives hint to lasting realtionships and love. There is tenderness and joy laced within these lines. Beauteous!
Thank you for this entry and I wish you well in the contest. It was a pleasure to have collaborated with you. The best to you!
Much Love ♥
Renee
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I love how depth and poetry is a truth song following you around. A beautiful snapshot Pamela just lovely.
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"the tune of unity"
sounds like it could be a hit
great job
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very nice penning, Pamela. the imagery and subtle metaphor of this write are brilliantly expressed. I enjoyed this write allot. Very good
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excellent my friend as usual, Good luck in this contest
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Awe... I love this.
The held for future referance tugged hard.
Well done best of luck in the contest.
Delila
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I like the idea of sugar spilling onto the sidewalk
sweet
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A beautiful vision reaching far into tomorrow.
well done
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