R(r)e(e)p(p)e(e)t(t)i(i)t(t)i(i)o(o)n(n)
(Repetition.)
~~~~~Haunting~~~~~ my days.
(~~~~~Haunting~~~~~ my days.)
Longing to b/reak away from the _m_u_n_d_a_n_e_.
(Longing to b/reak away from the _m_u_n_d_a_n_e_.)
Im going to POP, to explOde in a *burst* of light,
(Im going to POP, to explOde in a *burst* of light,)
Escape from this Oball and ~chain.
(Escape from this Oball and ~chain.)
f r e e
for now
(for now)
Author notes
my first attempt at dirty pretty. te gusta?
it was quite fun =D
--hotpinkpenguin
A contest entry
- Dirty Pretty Extravangaza! by Walking Oxymoron.
550 points, ended October 29, 2008, 17 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Oh Sweetie; You're so [D-I-R-T-Y] pretty. by Candy Morphine.
550 points, ended January 23, 28 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Any comments or things I could to do improve this are greatly appreciated :)
Comments
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i like this. you do dirtypretty really well. you express your feelings very strongly with it =D <3
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me gusta!
I love how the word free is singular, representing the idea of being free, but then it's back to the grindstone with repeating for now.
It's very clever.
I;m loving this! -
Interesting. I don't know much about the dirty pretty genre, but I do appreciate the poem. The repetition works well with the title and subject.
Mike
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