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Rain

glass
shatters
in the clouds
shards of liquid
fall

Author notes

Lanturne

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I hope I'm getting this right. Thank you, Arkbear.

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  • Arkbear gold member
    October 16, 2008
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    Yes.....you are getting this very right ~

     

     

    Aesthetics are flawless....and I do see the picture you have created.....just not sure if it really has a metaphore attatched, or am I over-looking something?

     

    Over-all......I think you have depth and definately made me ponder.....I hope you join me again in Poertry Formed XXXVIII

     

    God bless,

     

    Bear ~