“Meet me at the fountain.”
Sweet fragrance laced note,
written on pastel linen stationery.
A dejected middle-aged man,
a decayed marriage to a bitter woman;
how could he refuse the mysterious invitation?
The moon was full and orange, hanging low,
lulling the courtyard into dusky beauty.
She sat cross-legged waiting for him,
short black dress with an open back,
dangling diamond earrings and a black velvet choker,
black pumps with 3 inch heels to top it off.
She greeted him with a single black rose.
A satin red ribbon flowed from the stem.
He recognized those blackened eyes.
Her scarlet lips met his with passionate force,
as she lifted her leg around his waist.
He gasped for air in confusion.
Hesitantly he took her hand and followed.
Crows cawed as the couple entered the motel.
Without a word they fell to the bed,
undressing each other quickly and wildly,
having sex as they’d never had before
then collapsing in a slumbering wet heap.
A tug at his foot brought him from drugged reverie.
Twisted ropes dug into wrists and ankles,
as he thrashed about in senseless motions.
She stood over him under the warm glow of darkness,
moonlight bouncing off her diamond earrings,
a wicked smile of vengeance worn with pleasure.
Lowering herself onto him, he felt her oozing succulence,
And he stiffened to greet her with an upward thrust.
Caressing her own breasts, she grinded her hips in a circular motion;
he brushed deeply against her cervix, and she moaned, head back.
A guttural groan rose up from within as he came hard and fast.
She quivered in unison before melting onto his soft chest.
His smile dissolved as she reached into a drawer for a syringe of curare.
He flailed and screamed before being rendered paralyzed, yet conscious.
Unable to speak, he felt the sting of her nails claw down his chest.
Her iniquitous smile burned into his pleading, questioning eyes.
He saw his reflection in the large carving knife, she held so playfully,
and carefully used to cut shallow slits into his throat.
His mind was black with pain and he shrieked in silent terror,
for she continued to slash his torso and legs like a madman.
Blood splattered her face, and she licked her lips.
His urine flowed onto the crimson stained sheets,
as she made known his looming gruesome death,
at the hands of his secretary, hired by his wife.
“Meet me at the fountain.”
Sweet fragrance laced note,
written on pastel linen stationery.
A dejected middle-aged man,
a decayed marriage to a bitter woman;
how could he have refused the mysterious invitation?
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A contest entry
- Cheater's Club #3-adults only-pre-writes welcome by alaskanamber.
700 points, ended December 7, 2008, 9 entries
Gold trophy winner
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900 points, ended December 10, 2008, 11 entries
Honorable mention
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800 points, ended January 27, 124 entries
Gold trophy winner
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490 points, ended January 30, 90 entries
Honorable mention
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700 points, ended May 7, 23 entries
Bronze trophy winner
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700 points, ended June 16, 36 entries
Honorable mention
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1800 points, ended July 7, 77 entries
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900 points, ended July 12, 29 entries
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570 points, ended July 7, 31 entries
Silver trophy winner
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Comments
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"She greeted him with a single black rose.
A satin red ribbon flowed from the stem.
He recognized those blackened eyes.
Her scarlet lips met his with passionate force,
as she lifted her leg around his waist.
He gasped for air in confusion."
This was great. It really set the tone of the poem You have done a really good job on this piece Thank you for entering and thank you for sharing. -
wow...this is just amazing...great write! I dont know how to say how great this is in wording..just amazing ..
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Well done. I love this idea. Lol. Should remember it for future reference..thank you for entering.
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A fantastic write, very well written, no doubt about that
great expressions, dark twisted sexual harassment- all united in one fantastic poem 
and the last paragraph just did it for me- a very witty ending and the last line: ''how could he have refused the mysterious invitation?'' a killer line
I really enjoyed reading this, it is a true masterpiece worth every trophy you have received...
take care
Suza
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Mhmmm..
Oh yes yes yessssss! I so did enjoy this piece. At first, it seemed a clever but not out of the ordinary kinky piece-and turns assassin tale on me! I LOVED it! This is truly what should await weak willed, immoral people. Lol, had it been me, I would have invited my wife to play, her answer deciding my course of action on that note, but then again, I wouldn't have gotten the note in the first place. Lol, hell hath no fury like a woman scorned, eh?
My personal enjoyment in this twist of a piece set aside(for the moment), I also have to say as a work it is quite good, the flow delicious and the word choice and feel to it both arousing and darkly alluring as well as a bit intimidating near the end.
It certainly had me turned on from the motel to the very end. I could say the flow could get better but most things can always be improved and I simply like it the way it is. I like how it turns out to be his secretary(isn't it always? lol) and how you repeat the first verse at the end, very nice.
I thank you for entering this into my contest and I truly enjoyed reading this-to think I almost put this off for later! This teaches a lesson as well as get one aroused, a full three applause for thee this day!
Truly and Darkly,
Dirk
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Damn. This was a very interesting poem. I loved it. Very sexual at some points, but sick and twisted where it was needed. Great job at writing this and thanks so much for entering it into my contest.
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Goodness this is sexy but twisted!! I was on tender hooks waiting for the ending, it was like watching a very thrilling scary movie..
Brilliant
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hmm, very good twisted ending. i like it alot. he got what he deserved. i knew she would do him wrong. the moment you mentioned she was all black. but i kept thinking it was the wife in disguise. still a good twist.
Thank you for entering my contest
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dirty and raw wonderful piece.. thanks so much!
xo
Cyb -
omgoodness. A-MAZING!
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The words used in this poem show a strong favour for your litreture knowledge, the depth shown in this is close to hell and i never want to meet a secratry! xD
For me the 6th and 7th stanza's just blew me away, i'm guessing your telling from personal experiance on the sex side but hey i don't know.
Best of luck,
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Sex and death, what a turn on for any sensual poem. This was fine work at its best. It was such a turn on, and the it morphed into death, which oddly enough for me, didn't stop me from being turned on.
Amazing job
Favorite line
"as she made known his looming gruesome death,
at the hands of his secretary, hired by his wife."
Sweet, Sweet betral of lovers.
Amazing job
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Wonderful! Lust turned wrong! I love it so, so dark.
at the hands of his secretary, hired by his wife.
Hehe, maybe he deserved it, eh? Good luck with the contest! -
Brilliant.
This is a very beautiful and brilliant write. "His mind was black with pain and he shrieked in silent terror,
for she continued to slash his torso and legs like a madman.
Blood splattered her face, and she licked her lips.
His urine flowed onto the crimson stained sheets,
as she made known his looming gruesome death,
at the hands of his secretary, hired by his wife." Genius.! You've got a talent hun.
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Very well, this is what I asked for. Well written and very good. I loved it, good luck and thanks for entering.
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Great write.
Im not quite sure if this fits the prompt though.
Best of luck!
Buster
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wow sexy
you really had me blushing I really think that this was some kinky shit
The Positives:
ummm wow were to start. It was just plain awesome. I loved the imagery, and sounded great through out and morbid Now I am horney lol
Room For Improvement:
Nothing I can see you did wonderful
My Favorite Part:
His mind was black with pain and he shrieked in silent terror,
for she continued to slash his torso and legs like a madman.
Blood splattered her face, and she licked her lips.
His urine flowed onto the crimson stained sheets,
as she made known his looming gruesome death,
at the hands of his secretary, hired by his wife.
Hehe I very sexy way to die
Overall:
I give this an 9/10 you did great. I hope to see you in my future contests thanks so much for entering.
~*~Apathetic Poison~*~
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this was definitely an awesome write! I pictured all the details... yes all of them
i'm so glad you showed no hesitation in going as far as you did with what was morbid and what has sexual. made me feel guilty reading it in my parents' house 
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Forgot to give applause.
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Wow! Very detailed. Also, nice work on imagery. The image was different. A different meaning to morbid and gorey. The thing that really tied the poem was the repetition of the first stanza at the end of the poem. That was a nice move. I love it. Good luck in the contest.
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weird, but good, the premise is original but it seems the story might have worked better as prose wheather than poetry, still i really did like this poem so ill take another look at it before i finish judging, thank you for entering and good luck
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Wow, amazing writing. I didn't see the "horror" coming, great job! Thank you for entering and good luck.
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OMG! I love it, I love it! I still cant get over this! Good luck and thanks for entering!
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What a wonderful write, holds your attention all the way through, wondering what will happen next.
Beautiful....Best wishes in the contest
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I like it. I usually don't like poetry with overt sex, but I found myself liking this one...Why does nobody suspect the secretary? Quite an elegant murder. You managed to tell a gory story without over-using the gore. Nice job.
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WOW!
This is awesome. I love the twist at the end, great stuff here. Good luck to you in the contest.
**Ktulu Blackwolfe** -
Never Understimate The Undersexed Wife!!!!
I lolve the fact that this was told as a story and still held the form of poetry. And I thought it was the wife, so there was an unexpected twist at the end also. Here's a gold star for you!!! -
Haha, this is ome awesome stuff. I was reading the staart thinking "I thought I asked for gore" then you brought it in. I really think that this could be a potential winner. Good Luck
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Behind those beautiful eyes lies some macabre images. Well penned.
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Whoa
I wasnt expecting that. I liked the gruesome ending. Revenge is definately sweet. Thanks for entering and best of luck to you in my contest.
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oh sweet vengeance... great write, thank you for entering the contest good luck
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whisper
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Really lovely
This fountain of us
we should all bathe
in this fountain
of over and under
and let the waters
of life cleanse, enhance, reveal
The wishes of all of us sparkle in the dish
Which holds our hopes to be drawn up to dance once more
Wherever our spring whatever our days might bring
What we feel today is what will mean most of all
When we feel confused by the chill of November
The fountain in the spring is what we remember
This fountain of us: winter summer spring and fall
-c
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Thank you for your entry & good luck!
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whoah...this is very gruesome and way too disturbing for me, really. That being said, this is a very skilled write, and the twist at the end is very effective.
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wow what a write. So violant really. At first I thought it was so kind of S&M type of write but you really got me when you said it was fixed up by his wife. Wow! Good write thanks for sharing this and thanks for entering it into my contest.
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Holy crap!
That is wow...
GOOD!
That is amazingly well written!
Great job!
“Meet me at the fountain.”
Sweet fragrance laced note,
written on pastel linen stationery.
A dejected middle-aged man,
a decayed marriage to a bitter woman;
how could he have refused the mysterious invitation?
How creative this is... it grabs the reader, very well.
I love it.
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Excellent write--Sensual & Graphic. Verses flow easily to make it an easy as well a compelling read.
Great ironic Twist in its conclusion.
Very Well Done!
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well. that would be a nature, read in tooth and claw kind of poem. i'll have to do a better job of vetting my mistresses from now on. thanks for the heads up, so to speak. -silverfish
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great write, sis! very dark and yes, kinda creepy but I loved it!!
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Very dark and haunting. The death descriptions are very graphic. I am glad I am an Old Crow and not some philandering creep.
Mike
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OH DAMN!!
This is some evil twisted shit! wow, yeah now I know what revenge is..uhmm.. we're friends right? l.o.l. excellent , but creepy piece of writing lady!
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Stunning
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