I wait for the pain to stop.It's like a never ending ticking clock.They say the pain goes away with time.But i'll be in pain for all eternity,even in death.I try to talk,and I try to tell everyone how much it hurts.But it's like they can't hear me like i'm not even there.Talk to your family they say it will make everything better.Well,I tried that out and i'm hurting even more than before.They don't understand.No, no one understands.How can I talk when everytime I do people judge me,even my family.I feel so alone.wont you help me, wont you save me,I'm not crazy.It's not my fault can't you see.I'm all alone in this stupid world.I only wish for someone to understand.But no one can,and no one ever will.so I just think,and wish,and hope that someday someone will understand.That someday I wont have to be alone anymore.Can you hear me cry my invisible tears,for their all gone within my fears.I hear screams at night.I try to shut them out,but there etched in my brain.So I close my eyes tight and wait for it all to end.It never does.waiting forever in hope,but in fear.A wish that someday I wont have to cry my invisible tears anymore.
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I like the way you have put your poem in like a story theme very moving yet beautiful at the same time. Sorry if you feel like this
"A wish that someday I wont have to cry my invisible tears anymore."
Very good verse at the end my favorite lines it speaks volumes on it's own of your hidden pain.
"I wait for the pain to stop.It's like a never ending ticking clock.They say the pain goes away with time.But I' ll be in pain for all eternity,even in death."
Wow this verse rang so true in what I feel about myself
your poetry is made with such passion and intense emotion the reader can imagine the pain even though they might not relate
good job keep writing my friend
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i actually liked this layout, i think normally this would spoil a poem but i think your content and the way you have worded it just adds to making this poem more thought provoking
a great write
well done
i particularly liked 'have to cry my invisible tears anymore.' i loved the thought of invisible tears -
Can't count on someone else to make you happy. I suffer from the same delusion, and I always maintain hope that someday I'll find someone, but in the meantime you gotta try to make peace with yourself. Hope for the best, expect the worst.
Feel the pain dripping from this one, very brutal. I assume the form and everything is by choice, though it makes it kind of difficult to read. Other than that, very heartfelt piece, well done.
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this is good!
i feal like this sometimes to it makes me feal like thairs someone else out thair like me....
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