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a world of words

poetry gave her today

soft whispers

silken-wrapped inward

memories past

toted in her satchel

 

 

tear of mindless soul

it leaks from ripped stitching

in aimless drip

onto cement sidewalks

her guilt overwhelms

and follows her around

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  • Disturbed Prodigy
    October 20, 2008

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    you both did amazing on this, i mean really i enjoyed the words that flowed, it is always good to see when two mind become one in flow, keep it flowing and congrads on the contest


  • poetryality silver member
    October 17, 2008
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    I like that you took the reader from a place of hardship in wrong choice making to that place of guilt and shame. There is intensity written here poet. You dug beneath the surface and pulled at the heart.

    Thanks for the pleasure, happy to have collaborated with you. Darkly beautiful! I wish you well in the challenge.




    Much Love & Respect ♥

    Renee


  • afroqban
    October 16, 2008
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    wow, u took this somewhere else and it is awesome. great job


  • sheltered gold member
    October 16, 2008
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    yet another angle... guilt
    nicely done