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dreams and faded jeans

poetry gave her today
what yesterday was when
silken-wrapped inward
seeing eyes were tears she
toted in her satchel

 

it leaks from ripped stitching
and pock marked sentiments
onto cement sidewalks

soiled with "in her shoes"

and follows her around

 

momma never was that good with needles

 

 

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with Poetryality
from this:

"poetry gave her today
silken-wrapped inward
toted in her satchel

it leaks from ripped stitching
onto cement sidewalks
and follows her around"

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  • poetryality silver member
    October 17, 2008

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    I love the feel of these words. They scratch at the surface and dig beyond the skin. Yes...this is poetry. Loved that last line! Nice depth spilled here!

    I am esteemed to have collaborated with you poet. I wish you well in the challenge.


    Much Love & Respect ♥

    Renee


    • sheltered
      October 17, 2008
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      great contest idea
      and an honor to pen beside you
      thanks


  • Janice M Pickett
    October 17, 2008
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    Cool and I like how you showed the contrast. Good luck in this contest.


  • notorious gold member
    October 16, 2008
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    'silken-wrapped'<--okay, so she wrote that; but that's awesomely hyphenated

    'pockmarked'<--one word alone.

    Love that ending with momma and the needles; it's quirky, leaves you thinking about your familial life and well...it's just so good.

    Jessica


  • Cannonsfire
    October 16, 2008
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    Clever boy aren't you


  • PassionsPromise gold member
    October 16, 2008
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    wondefully penned my dear sheltered

    best wishes in the contest

    love
    Passions

  • She Stole My Voice
    October 16, 2008
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    ooh la la!
    I like it a lot.
    To me, the ending is powerful.
    ♥


    -Mary


  • afroqban
    October 16, 2008
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    lol the last line made me smile. good job


  • charcoal
    October 16, 2008
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    I like that last line a lot


  • fortyninereasons gold member
    October 16, 2008

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    this is brilliant. great collab!!

    Juls

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