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I walk alone

I walk alone.
My arm swings limp
where you used to stand
next to me.
I walk in silence.
My voice weak in the cold;
my loss for words is not for any other reason
but for the lack of company.
I walk blind.
I see nothing else
but the physical path before me.
No one's near me to look at and admire.
I walk deaf.
An annoying buzz echoing in my ear.
Your voice is not resounding in my head,
there's no talk of the weather today.
I walk shivering and timid.
No one's there to warm my shoulder with their arm
or hold my hand when I feel defenseless.
It's just me and this December morning.
Me without you, without warmth, without love.
Just me, cold and longing for your presence.

Author notes

Picture prompt in a contest by VampyreAnna
7. http://drkshp.deviantart.com/art/Blinding-III-99701500

Picture prompt in a contest by Cavca
Option 4: http://nornin.deviantart.com/art/Walking-Through-My-Past-97487882

sn: QueenCiar

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  • Cavca
    October 24, 2008

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    I like it a lot. I like how it feels empty and yet at the same time, lofty. I think it fits more of a combination of the two pictures rather than more specifically one or the other. I like where you took this. Good luck. Thanks for entering.

  • unraveled
    October 21, 2008

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    I like those last five lines a lot.
    You have a great story here. I think it could be better poetically expressed by separating it into stanzas and using less periods to make it not so... abrupt.

    But nicely done


  • GlammxCore
    October 16, 2008
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    LOOOVE ITT!!!!

    <3333

    Ill Walk With You!!!!!

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