gold
brittle
forfeit green
crisp crimson snaps
leaves
Author notes
ok Mr. bear... this is my re-entry into writing...be kind!
In a list
A contest entry
- Poetry Formed XXXVII - by Bear by Arkbear.
400 points, ended October 16, 2008, 21 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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"crisp" is the right word for this image. Welcome home, desi. 
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Yes.......very nice Lanturne......aesthetics are almost flawless
Nice imagery and sounds coming from your words.....nice job....good luck and God bless !
Bear ~
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Your entry centered..>>
gold
brittle
forfeit green
crisp crimsom snaps
gold
Your first L is a tad off in aesthetics.....not a fan of repeating a word in such a short Form.....but wonderful entry.....you are up against some really good entries....good luck & God bless you!
Bear ~!
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hey bear....the last word is uhm...leaves.... and am not sure how to fix the l thing...first time i've tried a laturne
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How strange.....it just left off some words from my review.....I think there is a bug in your page....no worries.....I see your entry as it should be now ~
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