Gun's knives a life of crime,
Only thirteen and i'm doin time.
Outta control i'm a big man,
Thirteen years old and i'm sprayin the can.
Smokin the weed, doin the line,
Whats yours is yours but it'll soon be mine.
Spinnin the wheel leavin my mark,
Took out that granny walkin the park.
BANG! BANG! look at me
BANG! BANG! i'm a big man.
Feels good making you scared,
Knowing that you dont want to walk my turf.
Playin cops n robbers just for the thrill,
Pickin up a gun just for the kill.
Ask that shopper who tried to stop me,
Lucky for him he only got it in the knee,
BANG! BANG! look at me
BANG! BANG! i'm a big man.
lookin for the enemy across the town,
they all gonna get it, they all comin down.
I,m all geared up ready to go,
Got my boy's with me to do the show.
So as i said before am doin time,
Seem's i'm not so good at this wicked life of crime.
BANG! BANG! look at me
BANG! BANG! i'm a dead man!!!
Author notes
this poem is not about any one person, it is something i wrote to say NO! to gun's and knife crime.
maybe if one messed up young child reads this it might stop them picking up a gun and following suit, there is far to many gun's and knives so readily avalible to these kids and something has to be done to stop it..
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Comments
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Gosh, I hardly know what to make of this powerful piece. It speaks of the stark reality for some of the youth in today’s society, which is so sad. Well done, poet! Thanks so much for entering my contest. It’s an honor read your fine work!
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Thank you for the entry good luck in the contest
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looks like you got liverpools extreme side down pretty good, and i think manchester , london, birmingham and a few other places, loved this read.
Michael
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Yes, but although I admire your intention in writing this poem, I really do not see how it belongs in my current competition - which is for poems about poetry and/or poets. I think you must have misunderstood the rules.
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good effort
i like it, i liked the way it made me think a kid was writing it. all the comments are like "poor kids there so innocent" but maybe not all kids ARE innocent. -
wow
this poem is amazing
i really like it
it depicts modern Society perfectly -
I have had a similar childhood to this, and someone came along and changed my life... You did a great job a putting these issues into words. Great Work
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Um. . .
Dude, I'm one messed up kiddo, and this just makes me wanna go pick up a knife. -
wow. i like this, and i love the message. its more blunt and in-your-face like, and i really like that! congratulations! i love it!
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Sometimes kids feel like they have no other way, Their parents sometimes just dont care. I have known a few kids like this. Its a sad sad reality, But its just that. Reality. Maybe your words can make a difference. Maybe we all need to make a stand. This is an excellent write!
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Wow
I really love this because well.. I used to live in a place full of kids like this and I knew a few..
Great write and good luck in the contest.
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I like the message your portraying here.
Good job, and good luck in my contest! -
This is so sad but I have seen many storys like this where has all the innocence gone from todays children anyway thanks for sharing good luck
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